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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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You have not been loved like this-- delete the "I" from midst of bliss... remove you thoughts of ownership... and the essence serpentine that ever would I call you mine-- a blur to dream, so sweet, sublime- no, you have not been loved like this.... |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Bliss is what Hoot has now...wish I could find it.. good poem!  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
You have not been loved like this-- delete the "I" from midst of bliss... ----------- that ever would I call you mine-- a blur to dream, so sweet, sublime- no, you have not been loved like this.... ----------- exquisite, perfect, i love this poem girl!! its SO YOU!!! like a kiss from those sweet lips. no...he has NOT been loved like this... excellent me twin...me bows before you... holding up those mirrors ... later sweet-gator There are places inside our souls ... that have never been touched. There are places inside our hearts ... that need to be loved this much. ~Janet Marie~ "What the caterpillar calls the end ... The world calls a butterfly" ~Lao Tze Tao~ ~Butterflies are meant to be free~ |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
In a place of serenity one will find bliss... This one is nicely written... Serenity a blur to dream, so sweet ... Regards, sudhir Hey you, out there in the cold, Getting lonely, getting old, can you feel me? Hey you, standing in the aisle, With itchy feet and fading smile, can you feel me? Hey you, don't help them to bury the light. Don't give in without a fight. Hey you, out there on your own, Sitting naked by the phone, would you touch me? Hey you, with your ear against the wall, Waiting for someone to call out, would you touch me? Hey you, would you help me to carry the stone? Open your heart, I'm coming home.... by Roger Waters (Pink Floyd) - The Wall |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
I liked this one A LOT!!! Me thinks your poetry is pretty darn cool. This piece held such a sweet honesty about it. Thanks for posting it! take care, amy  "Don't be dismayed at goodbyes. A farewell is before you can meet again. And meeting again after a moment or a lifetime is certain for those who are friends." |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
serenity, I loved it, I wish I was loved like that. Maybe once, but I thought it was just lust... Great peom Parker |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Poet deVine---thank you, and I am happy for Hoot too! Janet Marie---my sweetest cheerleader! thank you much--I'll e ya later! (My depression lifted after the 'lemon tree' incident--laughed all night..."He" is now total convinced I'm nuts...) Sudhir--------what a lovely compliment, I enjoy yur work as well... Aimster-------cool is good--I like cool-ty. Parker--------You bring up an interesting point, but I suspect you often bring up SOMETHING interesting. and fret not...I love ya!!! Thanks to all once again... |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
remove you thoughts of ownership... and the essence serpentine that ever would I call you mine-- WOw I love that image, beautiful, I felt bliss before once or twice but it wasn't as wonderful as what you described so maybe I am mistaken. lovely poem. ------------------------ "Here chewing your tail is joy" Richey Edwards "Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time". Baltimore Grotto "Will you accuse me as I hide Behind these layers of disguise And the mirrors of my own happiness.I've loved the freedom of being inside Need a new start and a different time Something grows in the space between me And it's twisting and changing this fragile body" -Nicky Wire |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Thank you so much brian---but must confess--the inspiration is too sweet...and by the way, if you have felt bliss--then you have had bliss...and a blessing it is, ain't it? |
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spiked Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 873Hammond, La USA |
A pleasant surprise to see this side of you. You see so much better through the eyes of a face with a smile on it. Very nice Serenity. simply poetic Rich |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Thank you, Rich---there are other sides to me yet---not sure if I am multi-faceted personality--or a multi-personalitied faucet...either way, hope it continues to be a pleasant surprise...ah ha ha ha ha..... |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
This is a really sweet and pretty love poem...I have to say: Awesome!!! Love and hugs, Lizzie  "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight." |
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