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Loves Me Not
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Loves Me Not |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion 
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Loves Me Not The pull of responsibility, The call to be with the others, You say that you would be with me, If you had your druthers. Some time doled, meted out, Figured into your to-do list, Leaves me thinking this romance, To you might not be missed. You can pencil me in on Friday, Even though tentatively, You’ll confirm by Thursday, If acceptable to me. It is not, I’ll tell you now, This is not how love is done, Demonstrating by actions, Is priority number one. So, if you happen to call tonight, And don’t find me at home, I found something better to do Even if I do it alone. I shouldn’t have to tell you this, It’s really a very bad sign, You’ve lived and loved long enough To know this by design. If you want to be with me, You’ll have to do better than this, Or you’ll see the backside of me, I'm the one you didn't miss. © 2000 Corinne Bailey |
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epoet Member
since 2000-05-11
Posts 291grand rapid,MI, usa |
wondering if this poem was written about a very bad relationship. seems like you are very bitter and angry at the gentleman who broke your heart and I understand why, just doesn't seem like this would ease the pain of someone like you. P. J. Kotrch carpe diem A soul once touched is a soul once blessed by love |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Thank you, Epoet, but things are not always as they seem. Sometimes a poem just writes itself without being based in reality. Corinne |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Corinne - I can fully understand the part-time lover aspect of this poem - it was a neat slant, looking at it from the recipient's viewpoint - Just one little question - Does this poem really mean what I think it means??? Do dirty old men hafta become your part-time lovers to see your backside??? Please RSVP, as I'm sure that the rascally scalawag Toerag is anxiously awaiting your response (as opposed to virtuous Long John and gentlemanly Balladeer). |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Very blunt and honest, I hate the now norm that seem to be between people. its always I'll see if I have an opening on my schedule. Though I like your attitude here, do you really think mooning someone is going to help.  parker |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
love the response rofg@mooning, but really, I know what you mean, you are either number one or not...and you either accept it or not...like your attitude here girl, good for you, great writing  |
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Jana Tovey Member
since 2000-05-30
Posts 257USA |
This is good advice to someone who needs to hear it...if they could fit a reading into their busy routine, that is. Well written, I like the way you spell it all out so effortlessly. |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Thanks, LongJohn, you can see my backside anytime you want, and Toe, who knows where Toe goes? Parker, you are too funny! I hadn't meant it that way, but you see the irony! LOL Thanks, friend. Thank you, Jana and Corazon, sometimes the mood to write out old angst takes hold, I know negative poetry isn't a popular thing to do... Corinne Corinne [This message has been edited by Corinne (edited 05-31-2000).] |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I like the message here...if someone truly likes you or loves you they will make time for you even with a busy schedule. Sometimes the truth is they are too busy with someone else or maybe not as interested as we would like to believe. James |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Corinne~ Got me chuckling with this one. I don't see 'negative' at all ... I see affirmative action ! 'So, if you happen to call tonight, And don’t find me at home, I found something better to do Even if I do it alone.' LOVE IT ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is wonderful, Corinne! I also loved the lines 'I found something better to do Even if I do it alone.' 'Alone' can be infinitely better than taking 'scraps' from someone's precious schedule. It's their loss for sure. Denise |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Thank you, Marge, Denise and James! Not my usual style, guess I'm kind of uncomfortable with it. Corinne |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Love Me Do..... name that tune. Well, certain women here, no names... focused on the lines.... I found something better to do Even if I do it alone. now why is that, and you must remember men are very visual, so keep those thoughts clean ladies...... Oh, the madness. |
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