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Kaile's no Letter 'E' challenge ...Dark Shadows Run Away...
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Kaile's no Letter 'E' challenge ...Dark Shadows Run Away... |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium 
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A pretty late entry, but I submit this all the same. Thanks in advance for reading... Dark Shadows Run Away... Part I ------- Blinding sunlight From out of a windowsill, Blazing, flaming light, Dark shadows, in my soul, loom still. Soul stirring, brain twisting, Ghosts from past, Control my mind, crushing, Swirling my body, I stay aghast. Part II -------- Logic took an amazing about-turn, Quickly shutting out light, Pulling down iron curtains, dim lamps now burn As I wait, trying to calm this fight. Approaching midnight, Await stars shining afar, To control my passion, put it right, Via Milky Way, I saw, coming a car Part III --------- A wagon stops by my windowsill, Sparkling shiny spots of light, A ghostly body, talks with sound so shrill, Pulls out a hand and grabs my throat. Says in husky sounds, "Did you think, curtains will cloud truth?" "Prison is within your mind, A wall is built within your soul" Part IV --------- Past days soon found a path away, I did not find a shackling chain, Blinding sunlight, now did not hurt, Final brick of my wall is put in right, I had victory, Now firm in my sight, I had finally Won my fight, That's it, that's it. ------ Hey you, out there in the cold, Getting lonely, getting old, can you feel me? Hey you, standing in the aisle, With itchy feet and fading smile, can you feel me? Hey you, don't help them to bury the light. Don't give in without a fight. Hey you, out there on your own, Sitting naked by the phone, would you touch me? Hey you, with your ear against the wall, Waiting for someone to call out, would you touch me? Hey you, would you help me to carry the stone? Open your heart, I'm coming home.... by Roger Waters (Pink Floyd) - The Wall |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Wow, this is great... and no E's? I can't even write my name without using 5 of them! Great job. "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde |
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shilpi Member
since 2000-05-24
Posts 73 |
boo hooo, that's all? I wanted more...lol !! gr8, just gr8.... shilpi |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
LoveBug, Me too. I am so attracted to 'E's that I had at several occasions, the tilt towards the sound of 'e', had to resist it pretty hard... Thanks for reading and posting 'great'... shilpi, A deep sense of gratitude flows from this muse, a sincere thank you flows instead of ink... Regards, sudhir |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
You certainly meet your challenges well Sudhir! This must have been tough ... well done, I enjoyed this! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Thanks a lot Kit for your words, I am glad that you enjoyed the poem... regards, sudhir. Hey you, out there in the cold, Getting lonely, getting old, can you feel me? Hey you, standing in the aisle, With itchy feet and fading smile, can you feel me? Hey you, don't help them to bury the light. Don't give in without a fight. Hey you, out there on your own, Sitting naked by the phone, would you touch me? Hey you, with your ear against the wall, Waiting for someone to call out, would you touch me? Hey you, would you help me to carry the stone? Open your heart, I'm coming home.... by Roger Waters (Pink Floyd) - The Wall |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
WOW Sudhir fantastic poem, and no e's. This is one challenge I knew I would not be able to do. Count the e's I have used so far, see! it would be extreme hard for me to enter this challenge. anyway, loved the poem. Blinding sunlight From out of a windowsill, Blazing, flaming light, Dark shadows, in my soul, loom still. Soul stirring, brain twisting, Ghosts from past, Control my mind, crushing, Swirling my body, I stay aghast. excellent piece. ------------------------ "Isn't it enough to see that a garden is beautiful without having to believe that there are fairies at the bottom of it too? " Douglas Adams. "Here chewing your tail is joy" Richey Edwards "Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time". Baltimore Grotto "Do not listen to a word I say Just listen to what I can keep silent" Nicky Wire |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
This is wonderful!!! I read it first for content-great..then slowly looked at each word for an 'e'....none! Challenge truly well met! |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
i am totally impressed  you make this tough challenge seem so easy.. WOW! |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
I bow down in gratitude with my tear-filled eyes. you people make me feel so important... Brian, Thanks. I am sure you can easily do it. I have seen your other works and I stand by my words here. PoetdeVine, Wonderful!!! Thanks a lot, I am honoured... Kaile, I am gratified with the thought that I could come up to your expectations for the challenge... Regards to you all, Sudhir. P.S. you constantly give me the strength to write more.... Hey you, out there in the cold, Getting lonely, getting old, can you feel me? Hey you, standing in the aisle, With itchy feet and fading smile, can you feel me? Hey you, don't help them to bury the light. Don't give in without a fight. Hey you, out there on your own, Sitting naked by the phone, would you touch me? Hey you, with your ear against the wall, Waiting for someone to call out, would you touch me? Hey you, would you help me to carry the stone? Open your heart, I'm coming home.... by Roger Waters (Pink Floyd) - The Wall |
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