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hoppy Member
since 2000-01-27
Posts 271 |
Here's a little poem i came up with last night. It's sorta weird but i think i like it, what do you think about it? Revenge Dance with the harper Strum us a cord we want to see blood from the sword Sing with the voice sqeal out a note those days have ended you slit his throat Time with the shrink this time you'll kill it's over your head you miss it still Drink with the man time i revoke i poisoned your brain they call it a stroke I dance with the harper struming you a cord i got to see your blood on my sword ---Written by:Hoppy 5-25-00 There's a fine line between genius and insanity. I have erased this line. -- Oscar Levant Don't worry about people stealing your ideas. If your ideas are any good, you'll have to ram them down people's throats. -- Howard Aiken |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Cute, no seriously I enjoyed this. The rhyming makes it sound like a twisted children's song and adds an edge to it. Interesting and enjoyable, after that poem I would not trust you with any sharp objects. < !signature--> ------------------------ "Isn't it enough to see that a garden is beautiful without having to believe that there are fairies at the bottom of it too? " Douglas Adams. "Here chewing your tail is joy" Richey Edwards "Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time". Baltimore Grotto [This message has been edited by brian madden (edited 05-26-2000).] |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Eeekkk,...hehe. Very interesting piece here. Definately a cool read. Thanks. *Peace. |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
ummm... i think you have a lot of anger inside of you that has come out very succinctly in this piece. pretty darn vivid, eh? LOL not quite sleep inducing... i think i'll stay up for a while and look over my shoulder  dp |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
imagery in this fantastic a very interesting piece  Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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