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~Blinded By Your Beauty~
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~Blinded By Your Beauty~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
How could I have missed it ... I was looking right at you and still I didn't see, I never saw it coming ... never saw you walking right out from under me. I know I never looked away ... and this aint about love making me blind ... its about wanting somebody so much that you completely lose your mind. God, it was just so amazing to be on the receiving end of you ... I could have just stayed here forever taking in the beauty of your view. There is still so much of you left here inside of me ... every place you touched me left a mark ... made a memory. For just a little while I thought I finally had contentment in sight ... but now all my dreams are replaying in slow motion, black and white. All I can taste are the things Im doing without ... I guess I thought if I held you close enough ... it would quiet all the doubt. I know we had no right in trying to hold on ... some things aren't meant to be, it's just that I got so used to you lying here next to me. Now I'm alone, yet it's like your still here in this bed ... how do I get you out of my heart, and out of my head. And I'm not sure but I think a person can die from this kind of ache, just how much can a heart bend before it finally breaks. How do you get over someone who has gotten under your skin, how do you let go when its something you've held so damn deep within. Some days I wake up and it feels just like I been kicked in the chest, yet there's no anger here ... under the circumstances we both did our best. Even now ... I'm still sitting here completely in awe of you ... and I know that from this point on ... there will always be a little part of you in everything I do. Janet Marie |
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ellie LeJeune Member Elite
since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156King of Prussia, PA USA |
Dearest Jan; This poem is so beautifully romantic and sad. I'm human, so would you please e-mail me and tell me this story? Only if you want. I love your poetry and this one is heavenly! Love, Ellie 02 |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Janet, another powerful poem filled emotional honesty. Fantastic, How do you get over someone who has gotten under your skin, how do you let go when its something you've held so damn deep within. ------------------------ "Isn't it enough to see that a garden is beautiful without having to believe that there are fairies at the bottom of it too? " Douglas Adams. "Here chewing your tail is joy" Richey Edwards "Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time". Baltimore Grotto |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Janet, Gee Janet I didn't know you cared so much, can I have another chance. Loved the poem. |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"And I'm not sure but I think a person can die from this kind of ache, just how much can a heart bend before it finally breaks." So powerfully emotional Janet Marie ... your words pulled my heart strings! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Janet, this read like a soft country song to me. Questioning, sad and beautiful to hear. lately i've been letting Sigmound Freud take apart poems and get to the real issue, maybe i'll let him out again. He just has this thing about everything relating to sex or something. Like thats all the women think about or want, but I know they just want to talk.....  Great emotional poem, loved it.... hey Sig got any comments.... He'll get bact to ya. Run. Parker |
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TerryW Senior Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 779Louisville, Mississippi, USA |
JanetMarie~ My dear, You leave me in awe. It was not too long ago that I was asking myself the very same questions. I know what you mean in this one. It is hard to see until it is gone. Very powerful piece, dear!  Love Ya~ ~you reached inside, you touched my heart, and I am all the better for it~ Terry A. Woodson, Jr. |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
You never cease to amaze me with your talents my friend......wonderful as always! Marina |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
BEG, wonderful writing as always. Feels like we're sitting in a quiet pub and your sharing your heart. Such expression! ~~Your so good!~~~ Oh, and BTW, nice writing! A life isn't significant except for its impact on other lives. |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Jan: Sweetie this one is GOOD!! written as always straight from your heart. You KNOW that I KNOW where all this is coming from! I am glad that you are working through it on paper. It's the best therapy I've ever had LOL. Truly beautiful poem! Love ya, Amy "Don't be dismayed at goodbyes. A farewell is before you can meet again. And meeting again after a moment or a lifetime is certain for those who are friends." |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Oh Janet Marie,...*sigh*, this is such an outpour of emotions. Lovely. You are truly gifted in expressing yourself. I only hope that your heart heals soon, and I wish you peace forever more. |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Jan, I must first say, great pouring out of your soul. " If only two people could fall in love without ever saying good-bye" This world would be perfect. Hope you feel better soon m'friend All my love, Jeffrey I lie awake in a world filled with dreams, but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Janet Marie-------shaking MY head now...now Wow...but Pow!!! "All I can taste are the things I'm doing without..." it's soul's yearning to complete itself....and you have written the ache... Hand over heart, a bow to you 'twin....overwhelming, this is... |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Janet Marie~ I'm still trying to catch my breath after reading this. Very touching and so sad, hoping you get through this soon and that everything is okay. HUG tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
THANK YOU to all for such SWEET, and encouraging replies...you heal my heart... I am graced by you all. love ya, jm Some things cannot be explained by verses that rhyme, They are not measured by the commitment of time. Some emotions run too deep to be described by words, Forgiveness and understanding-remain the most beautiful words ever heard. ~Janet Marie~ "What the caterpillar calls the end ... The world calls a butterfly" ~Lao Tze Tao~ ~Butterflies are meant to be free~ |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Hi, Butterfly Slippers. I'm human, and gator and squirrel and who knows what else! But you don't need to e-mail the story -- it's all right here in precise, heartfelt language. Glad to have read it. It made me smile as much as reflect. What more could you want in a poem? So thanks. Mike |
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shilpi Member
since 2000-05-24
Posts 73 |
Dear Janet, A really romantic and emotional one....words coming right from your heart.... Hope you'll feel better soon.... shilpi |
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David2 Member
since 2000-03-22
Posts 407 |
Janet, This was wonderful! This touched me more than any other work you have posted. Excellent work . A truly excellent poem filled with wonderful emotion. Great job. David2 |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Such a window you have opened...where your heart stings and sings. Wonderful poem, sweet lady! |
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kitkat Senior Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 878Nova Scotia |
Yet another lovely piece created by you. I understand the words you write oh to well. -------------- You got to get up every morning with a smile on your face and show the world all the love in your heart Then people are gonna treat you better You're gonna find, yes you will That your beautiful as you feel.~~~ Carol King |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
One of your best, my dear, from the heart and it shows! Corinne |
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Alwye
Moderator
Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Remarkable, JM....I stand in awe of you once again. Such beauty, such sorrow, but without anger or bitterness. This is exactly how I felt before I found it in me to let a very special person to me go. Thank you for showing us a part of your heart and letting me relate to it so closely yet again. *Krista Knutson* "Thought is real, physical is the illusion..." Albert from ~What Dreams May Come~ |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
I believe your entire heart is in this poem. You have loved very deeply, and now have shared that with us Excellent, JM Liz |
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Rosemary J. Gwaltney Senior Member
since 1999-08-26
Posts 997northern mountains, Idaho |
Oh, I've been there. I've been there. My heart aches for you. Beautiful, haunting, poignant poem. My favorite of what I've seen of yours so far! Very strong. Well written. ~ ~ ~ The spiritual wind that holds survivors aloft, plants the seeds from which bloom new hope ... R.J.G. |
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Ethan Halo Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793on the roof again |
JM- wow. i am left speechless. this was fantastic and captivating. (i sound like siskel and ebert.) you just vented for me!! i printed out a copy to put on the bulletin board. or my "inspiration board". this is truly great. someone told me once "you vent with class". it is one of the most gracious compliments i ever received or could bestow. i'm so happy to tell you that, girl, YOU vent with class! We all got somethin' we need to atone for. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Should I repeat the same word over and over again, but waht can I do, except describe in one word: BRILLIANT!!!! Well, I change with times, this time I say, !!!!!TRULY MANGNIFICENT!!!!! Regards, sudhir Hey you, out there in the cold, Getting lonely, getting old, can you feel me? Hey you, standing in the aisle, With itchy feet and fading smile, can you feel me? Hey you, don't help them to bury the light. Don't give in without a fight. Hey you, out there on your own, Sitting naked by the phone, would you touch me? Hey you, with your ear against the wall, Waiting for someone to call out, would you touch me? Hey you, would you help me to carry the stone? Open your heart, I'm coming home.... by Roger Waters (Pink Floyd) - The Wall |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
THANK YOU friends for always understanding and encouraging my little "emotional outbursts put to rhyme" the replies on this have been amazing. this place is amazing, because of the poets who "live" here. me loves ya all jm There are places inside our souls ... that have never been touched. There are places inside our hearts ... that need to be loved this much. ~Janet Marie~ "What the caterpillar calls the end ... The world calls a butterfly" ~Lao Tze Tao~ ~Butterflies are meant to be free~ |
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jeffbrowning New Member
since 2000-05-25
Posts 7Mobile, AL, USA |
Talk about being in touch. So complete. So real. This sounds like an excerpt from the diary of a persons heart. Thank you for sharing. "Whose place to criticize, Or place into a mold That which comes from the soul" |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Janet, I missed this first time round and now I peruse thru poetry abound and this one you've shared a time ago I must extend to you my compliments..It's sweet Coco |
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Alle'cram Senior Member
since 2000-02-28
Posts 1816Texas |
Wonderful-Awesome-Powerful-Heartfelt Loved beyond ordinary Left in distress Memorialized forever |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
Janet..Wow, I almost missed this one. Such powerful emotions and feelings that can only come from the heart of someone who has been deeply touched by another. Great work as always! God grant me the serenity to accept the people I cannot change, the courage to change the one I can, and the wisdom to know it's me. ~Unknown |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
EagleOne, thank you for pulling this one up...how could I have missed this!!! J.M.*****OOOOHHHHH MMMMMYYYYYY This is.......geesh I don't even have the words to tell you...but you KNOW that I KNOW. "I never saw it coming ... never saw you walking right out from under me. its about wanting somebody so much that you completely lose your mind. There is still so much of you left here inside of me ... every place you touched me left a mark ... made a memory. I guess I thought if I held you close enough ... it would quiet all the doubt. and I know that from this point on ... there will always be a little part of you in everything I do. I won't ask how....I just want to tell you that I'm in awe of your work and at the depth in which you capture every feeling so acutely. **Angel Wing Hugs** for this little beauty!! And why do I call it a Beauty... because cleansing your heart and soul of pain through writing can only be BEAUTIFUL....Love you for this S.S. |
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lorilockheart Member
since 2000-05-06
Posts 206Alabama |
Even now ... I'm still sitting here completely in awe of you ... and I know that from this point on ... there will always be a little part of you in everything I do. J. Marie, Sis, I'm crying! And still completely amazed at how close these experiences are to mine, and how much you write my own heart. I love you! That's all I can say. Lori ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ I hope you still feel small when you stand beside the ocean. Whenever one door closes I hope one more opens. Promise me you'll give faith a fighting chance. And when you get the choice to sit it out or dance - I hope you dance. song by LeeAnn Womack ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ |
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