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Crystal Lynn Junior Member
since 2000-05-21
Posts 18Miami, FL. USA |
ok this is just something i was thinking about...this is only the second poem ive written ever so please be nice  Once a little girl now trying to be a woman finding out it's hard with all these adult decisions i've made a mistake and corrected it with another even if it meant i'd never become a mother i think about you almost everyday wishing i was you in every way i was given the chance to become what she wanted me to be even if it meant you couldnt be with me i wonder what you think of me if that can be possible wonder if you still love me even though its kinda impossible can you forgive me and my childish ways cause in the future maybe in a couple of days we'll be together like it was suppose to be and we will be happy just you wait and see |
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Dawn Eclipse Senior Member
since 2000-01-31
Posts 637The Horsehead Nebula |
That was a wonderful poem! You sure that's only your 2nd? Happiness is a human desire, and you captured it wonderfully "Even a fool knows you can't touch the stars, but it doesn't stop a wise man from trying." Harry Anderson, "Night Court" *Cassandra Roseen* |
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netswan Senior Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369Washington |
This is a lovely poem - very sad subject. And, one of those hard lessons in life, that most come across the stepping stones of growing up. Thank you for writing about this. It is done very well! ~netswan |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Crystal, you couldn't have expressed it better than this. Truly magnificent how the thoughts and emotions are captured here. It has an ending that grasped me too. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
This poem has a very nice flow and I believe you expressed the thoughts you have been pondering very well. Take care. James |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
I believe you expressed yourself very well and beautifully too. I don't think you need worry about anything nice "nice" concering this piece. Welcome to Passions. jwesley |
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