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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209
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failed communication your control has grown over the years until it towers above me we sit feet firmly on the floor you needn’t stand for fear to send me spinning deep into the impenetrable silence of my anger [This message has been edited by Corazon (edited 05-24-2000).] |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
"spinning deep into the impenetrable silence of my anger" Damn, girl! Love these lines... love the whole thing! this happens all the time with your work... did i write this? LOL |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Corazon, Reads like your on the edge. Good writing. |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
powerful stuff, "your control has grown over the years until it towers above me" great poem, "spinning deep into the impenetrable silence of my anger" but I am reminded of a quote from Welsh poet Patrick Jones "There is eloquence in screaming". ------------------------ "Isn't it enough to see that a garden is beautiful without having to believe that there are fairies at the bottom of it too? " Douglas Adams. Small Black Flowers That Grow In The Sky "You have your very own number They dress your cage in its nature Once you roared now you just grunt lame Pace around pathetic pound games Wanna get out won't miss you sensaround To carry your own dead to swing your tyre tricks Wanna get out here you're bred dead quick For the outside, The small black flowers that grow in the sky They drag sticks along your walls Harvest your ovaries dead mothers crawl Here comes warden, Christ, temple, elder Environment not yours you see through it all Wanna get out won't miss you sensaround To carry your own dead to swing your tyre tricks Wanna get out here you're bred dead quick For the outside, The small black flowers that grow in the sky Here chewing your tail is joy" Richey Edwards |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Ah! So much depth... -------- Oh, angry one! Oh, silent one! I am scared, stand in fear nay, not by your wrath, nor by your ire, but by the silence that seethes with it, cold, steely, mighty, cruel, painful pit... ---------- Nice work here corazon, Enjoyed it, regards, sudhir Life is like a painting, That in an art gallery is left hanging, Though many come just to look at it, A very few actually come to enjoy it. |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Oh dear me,....*sigh*, what an expression. Thank you for sharing this power packed piece. *Take care...Peace. |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
doreen, “did I write this?” wow you couldn’t have paid me a higher compliment  thank you muchSeymour…yep sort of am…thanks though brian thanks for your compliments and for taking the time to include the quote, wow, powerful…am going to save this one and the verse from sudhir below both with my poem…. Sudhir, you too, thank you for the verse it is powerful and deep and yes I understand it well…sigh spitfire, thanks...I knew I had a poem in me this morning...lol...I could feel the labor pains....and then this one tumbled out [This message has been edited by Corazon (edited 05-24-2000).] |
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Irie Senior Member
since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493Washington State |
WOW! This is so well expressed with such little words. I know this feeling all to well, and you expressed it for me, better than I ever could have. And wonderfuly at that! Great Poem you have here Corazon! |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
WOW!!! This is great! Love and hugs, Lizzie  "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight." |
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Rocketman New Member
since 2000-05-24
Posts 6 |
What power...words! All that vividness in 36 words. Moving and soulful and gets right to the heart of the matter. What a very wonderful piece of writing. I look forward to reading others. Rocket |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
thank you all so much for your replies, do you know that in doing so and knowing that I am able to reach you with my words you help me heal? |
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