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Iced Tea Conception
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Iced Tea Conception |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Iced Tea Conception They were drinking iced tea at a sidewalk table where a black lab sprawled tongue lolling. She had young long legs, he, sweet green eyes and a goatee, they enchanted each other with a gaze of familiarity as her ring glinted and colored a rainbow on the sidewalk. I want to have a baby she said suddenly seriously wiping the table with her napkin where a piece of ice was slowly melting. Honey…he said and the word came out slowly, in it were all the times they’d talked, all the nights she’d cried and he had sighed then loved as though it didn’t matter when it was squirming warm and sweet smelling behind her abandon and staked his heart with a sizzling fear to the pillow. She turned her head away and watched the distance where her hurt lay visible and aching and he looked there and saw it too and reached out and squeezed her hand. The tree beside the table hung low branches and flowers bloomed around its trunk where a butterfly in lithe grace unfurled and painted to gorgeous an ordinary leaf as they left hand in hand pulling the sniffing dog from the sweet smelling dirt. [This message has been edited by Martie (edited 05-22-2000).] |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Wonderfully written Martie. You almost feel ashamed reading your poetry, as if your eavesdropping into the lives of a friend, and can't help yourself because of the beauty. |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Oh, Martie!! This is perfect! I could see this couple and their dog..you described it beautifully... |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie~ Uniquely you ... astonishing how you take the slightest movement and it becomes the poems' own. You are just the best ... that's it ! Hands down ! THE BEST ! You don't need to go thanking me either ... it's me who thanks YOU !  Love you to pieces ~ ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
WOW Martie, your poetry is so real so vivid, i feel it and see it all. LOVE IT!  Je t'aime plus qu'hier et moins que demain." I love you more than yesterday and less than tomorrow (unkown) |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Martie,...wonderful work. Such beauty to your words,...thank you for sharing this. Oh, BTW,...love the title. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Now you've done it.....you've left me speechless! Denise |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Mike, Marge and Denise have hit three nails on the head. This is truly the stuff of a great novel. There, another nail! Love you Liz |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
This radiates, Martie! Corinne |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Mike--Thanks for eavesdropping with me, Mike...there are so many wonderful moments. Poet de Vine--I'm glad that you could see this picture..I wanted you to. Marge--I'm thanking you, Marge...and you can't stop me...you are wonderful...love back Dark Angel--Thank you so much...I really appreciate your lovely reply. Spitfire--Thank you so much for reading and enjoying this...and the title sort of explains the poem, doesn't it? I'm glad it drew you in. Denise--Wow! What a wonderful compliment... Corinne--Thanks so much for taking the time to read and comment...you know I always enjoy your poetry too. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
This deserves another look. Back to the top Liz |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Gosh Liz, I'm sorry I missed you before...thank you so much for being such a fan...you are a wonderful friend. Love and hugs to you. |
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