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Beauty is agony .Palindrome response to Sven's challenge
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Beauty is agony .Palindrome response to Sven's challenge |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland 
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Ok here is my response to Sven's Palindrome challenge, if anyone is wondering it is abstract gothic...!?! ==================== Beauty is agony Sore scars scratching Weeping under desire of black vacant eyes Hands bare to cross Nails to feet, Mother close mouth silent. Mortuary in lovers of roses swallowed in sand, Jesus of crucifix Penance for pretty boys, Cleansed souls, murderers Addicts of blood spill. Redemption granted. Granted redemption. Spill blood of addicts Murders, souls cleansed Boys pretty for penance Crucifix of Jesus Sand in swallowed, Roses of lovers in mortuary Silent mouth close mother. Feet to nails Cross to bare hands Eyes vacant black of desire under weeping scratching sore scars Agony is beauty [This message has been edited by brian madden (edited 05-20-2000).] |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Excellent Brian!! Love the setting, abstract gothic, really let you play with the placement of the words. . . Superb images, especially when read aloud. . . Well done, my friend. . . ------------------------------------------------------------ That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Brilliant work, Brian, nice setting and appropriate words... Penance for pretty boys, Cleansed souls, murderers Addicts of blood spill. Redemption granted. Granted redemption. Spill blood of addicts Murders, souls cleansed Boys pretty of penance only one word amiss for <-> of, but that was necessary to be placed like that, I guess. Exceptional talent you have friend, Regards, Sudhir Life is like a painting, That in an art gallery is left hanging, Though many come just to look at it, A very few actually come to enjoy it. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
*bows before her prince* ~i am not worthy~ again I say...you scare me. awesome Bri, truly. you genius poets Sven>Sudhir>Brian... need to stop using these big words...(Palindrome) mere mortals like me have no clue  later-gators jm Some things cannot be explained by verses that rhyme, They are not measured by the commitment of time. Some emotions run too deep to be described by words, Forgiveness and understanding-remain the most beautiful words ever heard. ~Janet Marie~ "What the caterpillar calls the end ... The world calls a butterfly" ~Lao Tze Tao~ ~Butterflies are meant to be free~ |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Holy moly,....so glad I clicked to read this one. Very interesting...uuummm,...feeling a bit inadequate here..lol...superb writing. |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Sven, thank you for kind comments and for setting the challenge, though really I feel as though I just strung a bunch of images to together. Your Palindrome was quite stunning. Sudhir,Thank you for pointing out my typo, I will fix it right now.  thank your for your suggestion and also for very kind words. I only write what I feel but thank you, there is no shortage of Exceptional talent on this site. Ah Janet, sorry for using big words. but I don't have a clue what they mean either. lol I love the taoist quote. But we all know that you are no mere mortal, you can't fool us. SpitFire,thank you. inadequate...never say that, your poems humble us all. |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Brian, Great imagery!! You have met Sven's challenge very well. Have to get to work on mine. Nice job!! LW |
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