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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow 
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Mistaken Identity I am the victim of mistaken identity the mirror lies, it looks like me but I don't recognize the person I see. The thoughts living in another time another place a galaxy removed. A platitude of reality's sword shards of me spinning begging for more a merry-go-round of denials. Seeing, wanting, feeling butterflies of past the gone and died relationships. Why am I lost looking for rooms that don't exist, desiring the unreachable, touching my minds saved recordings failing to acknowledge they should have mission impossibled years before. The doors to never, never land swinging open and closed taunting me severing my wisdom dicing my mind tossing it dressing it eating it alive. |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
this is absolutely well done, succinct, full of imagery and emotion!! love it, gloria!! I truly think this is the very best i've read from you... excellent work, m'friend! |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
I agree with Doreen! This is without a doubt the best piece of writing I have seen from you to date! Fantastic! Denise |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
Doreen, and Denise, Thank you both so very much, I appreciate your reading and your kind compliments.  |
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Jon Mewett Senior Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 1304 |
Hold on to that muse here Dreamer this is wonderful. Jon |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
Jon: Thank you very much, I appreciate your kind reply. |
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lorilockheart Member
since 2000-05-06
Posts 206Alabama |
It seems you've touched on a part of me in these words. Maybe all of us. I love poetry that I can relate to. Thanks! Lori ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ I hope you still feel small when you stand beside the ocean. Whenever one door closes I hope one more opens. Promise me you'll give faith a fighting chance. And when you get the choice to sit it out or dance - I hope you dance. song by LeeAnn Womack ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
OUCH...this was sharp like pain itself! Very powerful writing you do, especially when speaking of emotions! Btw, I have a mirror like that too, if it makes you feel any better.  You take care of you! You know who you are! -pFF |
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7 Member
since 2000-04-26
Posts 113Amherst, MA, USA |
wow... very powerful. two phrases i love: "reality's sword" "mission impossibled" (never heard that as a verb before )good job! 7 |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Strong emotional outpour here. Wonderful work. Just wonderful...what a great read...I have sat in front of this very mirror and thought these same thoughts....amazing. Thank you for sharing. |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Gloria! wow! this was written with much intensity and depth. i read it a couple times and each time came away with a new meaning or something i had missed. this was written very very well! take care, Amy p.s. i agree hold onto whatever is inspiring this...this is excellent writing! ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~ |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Allow me to join in the chorus of BRAVOS. This one is very well done, Gloria.... |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
Lori: Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed. Genn: Thanks for reading and replying, and yes I was at the intensity of the emotions when I wrote this so it came through very strong. Yes I know who I am most of the time. 7: Thank you, glad you enjoyed it. Spitfire: Wow, thank you so much for your kind reply. Aimster: Thank you very much for your kind response, I was very intense at the moment of writing this, as for holding onto what created this not sure if it would be emotionally healthy for me to do so. I was in another time and place, way far away from reality. Balladeer: Thank you for your bravo's, I feel I've done well when you respond. |
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