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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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Storms Discord weighing heavy in moisture laden air sinuses pounding senselessly sad thoughts of despair What would break this tension release the firestorm brewing wind picks up and tosses mood a tempest pot is stirring One storm raging inside the other one, without will the lightening and thunder obscure the dreadful shout? Premonition belies the truth the heaviness does swell when both factions meet then run from coming hell One storm shall pass on the other, elephantine it sits fresh air shall over pass the sour discord that never quits 17 May 2000 ©KRJ Sunshine Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow |
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DestinysCharm Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 90 |
Wow, the intensity of this poem is amazing, it reached out and practically created a storm in my mind. Fabulous writing here, I love it. |
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LadySofia Member
since 2000-05-16
Posts 238FL., USA |
Dear Sunshine, We all fight battles ans wars, inside with ourselves, and on the outside, with those we love and know and sometimes just with a passer-by we know nothing of at all. At times we win, and at times we lose, but who is to say the battle is completely over, or that the winner has won entirely? Sitting down to ponder over this piece reminded me of such things. This poem was very lovely, and I hope to read more from you in the future!  ^_^ LadySofia |
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Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Wonderful Sunshine ... very descriptive and full of power! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Destiny, thank you for your comment... Lady Sofia, thank you for your input, and as for "reading more..." of me, just look for sunshine, and I'll be there... Thank you Kit, you saw the picture... |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Omigosh, I had missed this one. It is a brilliant caricature of real life, and what goes on inside a complicated human mind... One storm shall pass on the other, elephantine it sits fresh air shall over pass the sour discord that never quits great words, Karilea. Regards, sudhir Life is like a painting, That in an art gallery is left hanging, Though many come just to look at it, A very few actually come to enjoy it. |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Hey there,....great expression here. Such strength in your words,...such truth they hold. Very cool read,...enjoyed this. *BTW,...it's actually thunder and lightning here...at this very moment,..so the added effect is making this a killer piece,...right on  |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Sudhir, you didn't overlook this, you just hadn't found it yet...thank you for picking out the part that said something to you... Spitfire, glad to know you had the acoustics to go along with the piece... |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
I enjoyed the drama within your words...very strong images and wonderful metaphor... ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
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Thank you, Claire... |
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Lorraine Nisbet Member
since 2000-05-18
Posts 218Jersey City, NJ USA |
Very good, Sunshine. I really like it! ~Lorraine |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Thank you, Claire |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Thank you, Claire |
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