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The Daffodil
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The Daffodil |
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Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
THE DAFFODIL She is the first to bloom in the spring, lifting her head towards the sun to sing of love and laughter, caring and giving, sharing the joy she feels in living. But each night as the sun leaves the sky, she lowers her head and begins to cry. Loneliness shadows her face in repose, Again he’s picked the tulip and rose. Always waiting to be chosen and then, always passed over again and again. The sun will rise and she will show the cheery face they all may know. But when again, she is passed by, The evening comes and she retreats with a sigh. Always waiting to be chosen and then, always passed over again and again. No one can tell during the hours of light, of the secret desires that haunt her night. To never be left alone to die never again, alone to cry. Always waiting to be chosen and then, always passed over again and again. Pick me she sighs, pick me please… but behind the smile, no one sees The tears that are shed with a silent moan, she is never chosen she dies alone |
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bobbycat Member
since 2000-02-06
Posts 233USA |
*rushes out and picks every daffodil she can find* sweet pretty flowers.....now you don't have to cry!! Now you don't have to die alone!! I'll save you!!!!!  (oh, btw--great poem, LOL!)  Christina =^..^= |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
I fall before you, as this is by far the most beautiful thing you have ever written! Of course, I'm partial to daffofils... Maybe that's why I found it to be so beautiful. I like how you kept repeating those 2 lines...made a big impact on me, the reader. And so sad...the ending. Bravissimo! Such a delicate, heartwrenching tale! You spun it so lovely though. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Just beautiful deVine. . . even the daffodils get picked by those who know their true beauty. . . Wonderful my friend. . . ---------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
PoetdeVine~ This is so gosh-darned sweet ! Now ya' got me crying for that poor little daffodil. Your day will someday come. Lift your blossom of beauty to the warmth of the glowing sun. When roses bleed red and tulips turn blue there will still be a place for you. Sunshine bright is your hue ... Smile little daffodil for I LOVE YOU ! ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Irie Senior Member
since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493Washington State |
Oh Sharon! I have never felt so bad for a flower before! This is beautiful and sad! I say she's left in the flower bed for every one to see her beauty before she is picked. Though, I suggest that person hurries and picks her before some one else comes along and admires her. Beauty that is ignored, will be lost to someone else. Womderful Poem!  |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
No, Poet deVine, No. The daffodil will never die alone. I think this is what will happen. When all the roses and tulips are picked, the daffodil will be there still smiling, as it does each day, and then he will realize the sincerity and intensity of the daffodil's soul and her strength of character, and will appreciate the daffodil. Pick her, he definitely will, but will also keep her closest to his heart. Oh, I am sorry to not have said this so far, this is a great poem, really made me think whether, I in my life have overlooked any smiling daffodil. I am happy to know that I haven't done so yet, and this poem will stay lingering in my heart forever to prevent me from overlooking any daffodil... Thanks for the poem and the inspiration to start a thought process... Regards, Sudhir. Life is like a painting, That in an art gallery is left hanging, Though many come just to look at it, A very few actually come to enjoy it. |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Oh Poet deVine ... you've spun this tale with such incredible beauty ... this was truly lovely and heart-wrenching. I adored this! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Thank you all for your kind words. I really am not starting a 'save the daffodil' movement, though it is also my favorite flower, the symbol of spring to me. The daffodil also symbolizes unrequited love...that's why I wrote this poem. *sigh* |
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ellie LeJeune Member Elite
since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156King of Prussia, PA USA |
I just love this poem. The flow, the Rhyme, all loveliness. The message that we need to really pay attention to, the loveliness that is in the heart of each creation of Gods. also, thank you for your wonderful response to my poem. Ellie 02 |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
PDV: The title caught my eye... daffodils are my favorite flower. *S* I didn't know they represented unrequited love... but boy, can I ever identify with the "pick me!" cries being ignored and dying alone! *G* I'd applaud... 'cept I'm busy wiping tears. *S* Beautiful!! |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Sharon...oh my, what can I say? This is so sad I sit here with tears in my eyes, but darn it's so well written. I think this has to be my favorite of all of your work. |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
PdV, i will now see flowers in a whole new light. Such an expressive and sad poem you have written here. Is that metaphor i see in that little flower??? ~~very nice writing from one of the best~~ (your fan club member) |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very beautiful and touching, Sharon! Denise |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
The Daffodil is also strong and independent and grows among many in sunny upturned glory...the prettiest view from the street, in perfection still growing and free...and un-picked. Love the poem, Sharon...made me think daffodil. [This message has been edited by Martie (edited 05-17-2000).] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Hummm, let's see, reasons I like this poem...well, there's Sunshine, and hope eternal, the requisite sadness, and of course the repetitive "Always waiting to be chosen and then, always passed over again and again." Sounds like something that pleases me much, it does! Good job, Sharon! |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Lovely writing but I would hate to be that Daffodil..and yet in some ways I am. James |
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DestinysCharm Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 90 |
What fabulous writing you exhibit here to tell your tale. Flowers are beautiful, yet so is each and every human and creature we pass by each day. Thanks for sharing this poem here with us. |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Oh, this is a wonderful poem. It really touched me! It's sad to think what untapped beauty there is because we have judged by looks instead of charactor. "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde |
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Alle'cram Senior Member
since 2000-02-28
Posts 1816Texas |
Dear PoetD, Awesome this is. One of my very favorites. If given a choice, I'll pick the daffodil next time. What a Devine Poet you are. marcy |
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LadySofia Member
since 2000-05-16
Posts 238FL., USA |
Your poem! Gasp! It made me swim inside. Love is like a your flower, which grows and endures hardship time and time again, until the bud blooms and show its beautiful face. This one may have been passed over again and again, but the day will come when someone falls for its inner beauty, digs it up and plants it before his house to spread its seed across his lawn and grace his world with its presence This was a creative pleasure to read, and mayhap there was a metaphor...? lol Truly wonderful!^_^ LadySofia "To the innocent and ancient ones, the sparks which light our fires." Amanda Piatt |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Oh boy!!!...or should that be, oh girl!!! I love it when I see all the bulbs in my garden and know that they will grow to smile and turn their heads to the sun and my tulips all come out about 3 or 4 days later and the mix and match in colour just makes me smile so much but if I had to chose which I would pick, I'd have to say them all but then I would be left with a bare garden and I couldn't just pick one or two....when it's hot, like now and they are comeing to the end of their life I like to sit with a few lit lanterns in the garden and enjoy their beauty but I think I may be tempted to give each one a good night kiss... Beautiful!...Guess we all turn our heads to the sun, just like our daffs.. HUSG |
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redheart angrybraids Member
since 2000-04-16
Posts 410honolulu, hawaii |
this is really a good lay out, it all flows together really nicely. i have never heard such a sad poem about a daffodil, or any story about a daffodil. i love them, i used to think they where the luckyest flowers, because they had to sets of petals. any how lovely use of words. i love it when a poem flows. kindly, redheart angrybraids |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Truly great writing, deVine one. Your poetry is a bouquet in itself....nicely done |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
The secret of fair daffodil She's stalwartly perennial You made me write those words with this poem, if I recall.....  ... This is indeed one of your best.. |
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Enotneicna Member
since 1999-06-06
Posts 340Oakland, Or, USA |
Ohhhh, I love daffodils! I wait every spring for them to bloom.......and have them in vases in every room.......such a wonderful piece befitting such a precious blossom! Words are my medicine. Read and live and love and heal! |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
you truly have a gift pdv |
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Jon Mewett Senior Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 1304 |
Hi PDV Or should that be daffy. There's thorns on the rose And remember this The Daffodils got The sweetest........Kiss Jon |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
very beautiful....great poem...but I am like rainbowgirl I guess....I love to see them grow but rarely want to pick them as I love to see thier beauty outside, this is a wonderful poem |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
That was beautiful and sad, I love daffodils, they seem to pop up over night when spring arrives. They are one of my favourite flowers, I always love to see them in large groups on the lawn. They are nicer there than in a vase, maybe the person in the poem realised that. either way lovely, fantastic poem. |
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Kellsue Member
since 2000-05-06
Posts 210Waukesha, WI USA |
Such a beautiful poem!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!  ~Kelly ~Kellsue Reflect upon your present blessings-of which every man has many-not on your past misfortunes, of which all men have some. ~Charles Dickens We make a living by what we get, but we make a life by what we give. ~Winston Churchill |
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hippie_teen Junior Member
since 2000-05-18
Posts 18Escondido, CA, USA |
Great poem, oh devine one. I am always amazed by your work. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Oh Sharon this is really sad, yes I will go and pick everyone also. poor little daffodil, love daffodil's btw Beautifully written Sharon as always Je t'aime plus qu'hier et moins que demain." I love you more than yesterday and less than tomorrow (unkown) |
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Kelly Member
since 1999-07-03
Posts 145 |
Very touching and beautiful. I think it belongs back on top. |
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