Open Poetry #7 |
Descending Into Happiness |
wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
A pretty day < !signature-->Is it not How can there be A despairing thought Frivolous time To sit and wonder Somewhere else Rain and thunder Shelter for me Food and clothing Serendipity Somebody’s loathing Happenstance Circumstance We all are given Half a chance Die for me Die for you Rather you be Gentile or Jew There can be only one The Highlander said I say a good motto But Jesus instead Love me Love you Throw down the petals And take in the view War and Peace Peace and War Till God can’t Take anymore I love you all I wave goodbye There is a tear In my eye I’m not grand I have my sins Until tomorrow When Christ descends Good Night All Sleep Well Love Each Other I Won’t Tell!! The doctor said, "You're almost dead. Don't eat green bananas no more." The sick little monkey groaned and said, "But that's what I 1-2 the 3-4." from The Monkey--Shel Silverstein [This message has been edited by wayoutwalt (edited 05-17-2000).] |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Walt~ You are so cute ! 'Happenstance Circumstance We all are given Half a chance' Brother, half a chance is all I need ! I loved this little ditty. I really like the title. Shhhh ! You promised not to tell ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
Excellent work here walt, I am sensing a real sadness in this poem, especially with the lines at the end of the first 4 stanzas, and the line "I wave goodbye" Oh, and I love the lines "Till God can’t Take anymore" Really powerful stuffs walt. |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
wow, no kidding, the power, the emotions behind your words...you put your faith...the man that you are out there in simple terms, you let us *see* how you see...great stuff walt |
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Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This one says a lot, very good, Walt! Denise |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
A clever title, great poem and good advice. I might just give it a try and descend into happiness. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I enjoyed reading this Walt...James |
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DestinysCharm Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 90 |
What a poem, you seem very talented. I like this one. |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
thank you all and mistik is right and all of you are right and i'm getting there on the happiness part |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
You got some mighty profound words here Walt! My favorite, it ranks WAY up there in my book. I hate to see you sad, but I tell ya, you sure bring your emotions together with just the words! BRAVO!!! |
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