Open Poetry #7 |
~Raindrop~ |
SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Raindrop~ A black raindrop fell from the night sky echoing sounds of anger by and by an inch in front of where I stand drowning all that I had ever planned. A red one fell each day that followed screams of fear I had swallowed swimming in a pool of thick liquid,...thick thought trying my best not to give up and get caught. It’s thickness pulls at my feet dragging me down to where the liquid meets my lips,....then my eyes oh forgive me angry skies. I have no boat,...no umbrella,...no air haven’t you the sympathy to see me,...to care? to give me a chance to deal with everything to release my soul and let my heart sing? |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
I know what you mean it was raining all day today I felt quite low but it is never overcast forever, there will always be a sunny day. "I have no boat,...no umbrella,...no air haven’t you the sympathy to see me,...to care?" sometimes life catches you unawares and unprepared but as hard as it is you have the make the best of every situation. Next time it rains run as you did when you are child and think of all your fond memories. A great poem, I hope you found a silver lining or rainbow on your rainy day. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very well done, SpitFire! Denise |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Brian,...thank you for reading,..thank you for your kindly advice. Your words were a rainbow to my otherwise cloudy day ~Denise,...thank you for taking the time to read and reply,...it means lots. *take care. |
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Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
very good spitfire loved the color of the raindrops linked to our emotions. |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Great poem spitfire....keep 'em coming All my love, Jeffrey I lie awake in a world filled with dreams, but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
SpitFire~ I liked the emotional colors of your raining. Here's to rainbow's tomorrow. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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insect Senior Member
since 2000-04-22
Posts 1014 |
Wow! I couldn't let this beautiful poem drain away. |
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