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insect Senior Member
since 2000-04-22
Posts 1014 |
Lost in a time Here I am, back again Lost in a time of love and pain This time repeats, repeats when When I'm here, here again Deep in love, love again Making love as much as I can This love I'm giving, giving when When I'm in love, love again Now you're leaving, leaving again Left alone in the poring rain This pain is hurting, hurting when When I'm in pain, pain again Here I am, back again Lost in a time of love and pain This time repeats, repeats when When I'm here, here again Deep in love, love again... |
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Dawn Eclipse Senior Member
since 2000-01-31
Posts 637The Horsehead Nebula |
That was a most lovely piece. It seems that we all encounter that during our lives... but it makes us all the more stronger. "Even a fool knows you can't touch the stars, but it doesn't stop a wise man from trying." Harry Anderson, "Night Court" *Cassandra Roseen* |
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insect Senior Member
since 2000-04-22
Posts 1014 |
Dawn Eclipse…Beautiful name you picked for yourself. And thanks for the most lovely reply to my poem. Very true what you said.  |
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tulip Member
since 1999-07-04
Posts 320unknown |
Insect, I'm right where you are! It seems life repeats itself for some of us, but maybe we're lucky because we can allow ourselves to fall in love! |
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netswan Senior Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369Washington |
Insect this poem made me cry -- great writing. But, wants me to teach so you do not have to experience this again and again. Email me if you would like advice warmly netswan |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Well written Insect ... I enjoyed the way you intertwined the repetitiveness with the theme of your topic ... very well done! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
I've been stuck in this loop many times I've been stuck in this loop many times I've been stuck in this loop many times I've been stuck in this loop many times Parker Parker Parker Parker |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Nice work, I see here. One suggestion to keep the style consistent, choose this for a first line "I am back, back again".. Ah! I cannot stop commenting can I?? Meddling creature, I am and I seem to be...Regards, sudhir. Life is like a painting, That in an art gallery is left hanging, Though many come just to look at it, A very few actually come to enjoy it. |
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insect Senior Member
since 2000-04-22
Posts 1014 |
tulip…"we can allow ourselves to fall in love!"…. that sounds so beautiful… THANK YOU very much! netswan…I am touched that it touched you! You care so much. You are a swan with a halo! Sometimes my heart can show in my poetry…but you have the biggest heart of all…I thank you very warmly Kit McCallum…You are quite a package thank you are quite a package… Haleyja…Just press Esc… Sudhir Iyer… I am back, back again Lost in a time of love and pain This time repeats, repeats when When I'm here, here again Thank you for the tip…it was a long poem and it would have taken me FOREVER to change all those verses. Thank you for the tip…it was a long poem and it would have taken me FOREVER to change all those verses. Thank you for the tip… it was a long poem and it would have taken me FOREVER…Esc…Esc..Esc.Esc |
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