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I thought that I could write.
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I thought that I could write. |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
I thought that I could write. I thought that I could write A piece of poetry The best I ever tried Words where are they when I’m in need Some don’t come to me And others yet incise so deep I tried to write about your beauty But lost in your eyes Words cannot full fill this duty I tried to write about your tenderness But lost in your hands My lines aren’t blessed I tried to write about your charm But lingering there I was lost inside your arm I tried to write about your love I feel But drowned in your soul No words seemed real I tried to write about my love But with bleeding heart How can I begin my dove? I tried to write about the way you sing But lost in your song I could not begin I tried, but failed so miserably To write a piece of poetry Describing you and me The best I ever tried, was to hold your hand the day you died Note: dieing does not always mean the physical death, it can also mean to lose something very special. In this case I refer to the "very special". The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
I used to think that true beauty could not be expressed, that words only taint and devalue its wonder, but looking at this site and reading the poems changed my mind. I guess I lack the verbal capacity to express the pure wonders, but still once I am able to appreciate them and still find them in life I am not too bothered. A great poem, I am sorry for your loss (the day you died) |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Volumes, sir, your words speak volumes... |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
"I tried to write about my love..but with bleeding heart how can I begin my dove?" Lovely writing..I hope everything works out for you Helmut. James |
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netswan Senior Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369Washington |
Well done, HelmutB --) Yes, I agree, hard to write about love and beauty --when your heart is bleeding take care netswan |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
I love the way you've written and followed through with your theme throughout the poem Helmut ... you've said this beautifully. Best wishes, /Kit |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
brian madden Actually your not wrong at all, I find it very difficult to find the right words too. In this case my feelings have type the poem. Thanks for reading this Sunshine Thank you so much, the word volumes means a volume to me....and then some James Thank you so much. I hope so too netswan I will try to take care. This person means a world to me. Thank you for your kind words Kit Your words are so appreciated and thank you for the good wishes. I'm gald you liked the piece. The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Helmut, my dear loving friend~ I would wish for you to regain your happiness and your 'life'. Your words have not failed you, sir. Very special indeed. Love to you ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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lorilockheart Member
since 2000-05-06
Posts 206Alabama |
You haven't just tried to write - you did. And beautifully. This reminded me of something - I think a poet never stops writing inside. There are always thoughts, feelings, and emotions banging around inside trying to get out. Sometimes it comes out easier than others. To me, it could just be some random thought that occurs to me, and I think - I need to write. Other times, I have all these ideas and I just can't put it together. But you have done it here. Thank you. Lori ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ I hope you still feel small when you stand beside the ocean. Whenever one door closes I hope one more opens. Promise me you'll give faith a fighting chance. And when you get the choice to sit it out or dance - I hope you dance. song by LeeAnn Womack ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
Marge Thank you so much, where would I be without thee. You are very special your self, you know. Lori Thank you so much for your reply. I have to agree with you; my thoughts are constantly on the go and it’s sometimes so hard not to take a paper and write these thoughts down. And yes, sometimes nothing comes of it. But I try to hang on to those pieces of paper. Eventually I can get back to them and most of the time something good comes (well good for me) out of it, after all. The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. |
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sonjes Senior Member
since 2000-02-18
Posts 564North Carolina |
What a wonder is a poem. You convey so much feeling here without any flourish. This flows well from beginning to end...I completely felt every word and emotion. Don't care what people say Just follow your own way Don't give up and use the chance To return to innocence. -Enigma |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
 By explaining how you couldn't find the words....you found them in a most touching way. This was a beautiful tribute to the one you speak of and the love for that person shows though every line. Thank you for sharing a piece of your heart and soul with us by posting this.The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams ~Eleanor Roosevelt~ |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
You haven't lost your touch for words or for writing ... very nicely done  Rex}>{{{{o> |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Helmut...sometimes things don't die, they just change as we also change in our perspectives towards them. True friendship, my dear, never dies and you will always have a friend in me. Love you my friend Ruth |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Sometimes no matter how hard we try, we can't find just the right words. This is lovely, Helmut! Denise |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
So often a loss such as this cannot be described with words, Helmut, as we know...but your "desire" to express speaks quite audibly and beautifully. L. and S. P. Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
sonjes Thank you for your words, I'm glad that the poem made you feel. It fills my heart with happyness. Butterflies_dont_cry I'm still searching but have also found, I almost want to say. Thank you, May your butterfly never cry. I hoped and now you say I did, convey how I feel. PS "Eleanor Roosevelt" she was right with her words. I have to thank you. Rex Allen McCoy Hello Rex. Perhaps you are right about "not losing touch with words", but I still miss this hand. hoot_owl_rn Ruth, yes you could be right with the fact that life changes and also that true friendship will never die. But above all this, I'm glad to have you as a friend. I know that you are there and I know where I can land if I need to. Thank you. Hugs and Love to you. dsnyder I agree denise and thank you for your kind words. I liked the "Lovely" very much Meadowmuse Desire is like fire It will burn within me heart and words cannot smuther this fire Thank you, Claire. Your kind words are speaking so clear to me. L and S.P. (you) "Henry David Thoreau", so true. The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Helmut, you don't write.....you flow. Your works are always filled with sincere and pure emotion which make everything you write produce quality. Great to see you again |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
Balladeer A nice comment comming from you made my heart beat faster. I always have and will be admiring your work. Thank you The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. |
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