Open Poetry #7 |
pieces of me |
Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
pieces of me one two more sometimes too many at a time falling tumbling holding me together weighing me down I struggle to round them up and put them back in place but somewhere along the line I lost the cover of the puzzle and I can’t seem to find where they fit so I stuff them where ever just to keep from losing something I might someday need but the mirror shows the me that is the result of my puzzle piecing my lack of goals my anger strutted walk though life and I don’t think that’s what the picture on the box is supposed to look like so its no wonder that I put a corner piece where my heart should go and now it hurts when it beats against the jangling angles I have cornered inside of me and even my poems are suffering along side with the inside of me they wander and lose sight and have no end no beginning and I can’t put them together right in the middle either… and another piece falls |
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REBECCA ALLYN Member
since 2000-05-09
Posts 91Lima,Ohio |
WOW!! such heart!! I really can feel where you are coming from on this one!!Wonderful work!!! Remember:there is always a rainbow after the storm LOTS of LUV, Becky |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
Me thinks you just need a gentle hand to put your puzzle back together dearest!!! ((((HUGS)))) and more if you need them!!! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
thanks you two...am just feeling "misplaced" lately.....hugs back |
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aurora New Member
since 2000-05-10
Posts 9 |
WOW!!! Your poem really tapped into my own struggle to fit the puzzle together, thanks!! Just hold on, your clarity will return! Sincerely, Aurora |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Well, Corazon, you may be feeling out of place but your poems are certainly not suffering from it. They are some of the best I have read! Denise |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
it's a unique moment for me when all my pieces fit together... again, i really identify with your work well written metaphor... nice job! |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Great poem, discombobulated one!! *S* |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Hang in there sweetheart, sometimes it's the picture on the box that's all wrong and what makes up the real picture is incredibly beautiful...yes?.. You take care HUSG |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
Aurora thanks...hope you do better at your puzzle than me Denise thank you, your praise always makes me smile doreen peri from you that means alot thank you suthern those are might big words for a southern gal *g*....good to see you here...thank you RainbowGirl hey...I like your way of thinking...wanna help me build my puzzle? lol I get the feeling we will like the picture we come up with |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Corazon* This is superb!! Every line drew me in deeper and left me with a feeling of understanding. I don't see your poems suffering at all!! Poetry is a chance to work it all out and perhaps make things fit how they are supposed to....my own puzzel is missing a few edge and middle pieces as well Well done and thank you for sharing this piece!! |
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lorilockheart Member
since 2000-05-06
Posts 206Alabama |
You are so creative! I enjoyed every line of this poem, getting closer and closer to the meaning. Unique expression of how jumbled up we sometimes feel. Let me tell you, I think you've got it together more than you know - the way you've put it into words shows you are really in touch with yourself. I enjoyed this one - lots! Lori ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ I hope you still feel small when you stand beside the ocean. Whenever one door closes I hope one more opens. Promise me you'll give faith a fighting chance. And when you get the choice to sit it out or dance - I hope you dance. song by LeeAnn Womack ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
You've put your words together beautifully into a lovely picturesque package Corazon ... this is a wonderful and flowing verse! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA |
Corazon, I love your poetry. You put so much heart and feeling into it. It matters not how strait the gate; How charged with punishments the scroll; I am the master of my fate: I am the captain of my soul. --W.E. Henley |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Nuts. I thought by the title you were having a garage sale. You're writing is, as always, hard hitting and real, Corazon. This one is no exception. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Corazon~ I loved this ... If the pieces of the puzzle of me ever come together ... someone might just take me apart, put me back in the box and take me to that garage sale Balladeer thought you were having. This render was brilliantly displayed. Your writing is 'jig-sawing' nicely. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
thanks all *big soft smile* my life is so jumbled these days that I was surprised to see responses from PIP in my mail, I barely rememeber last week and the writing of this...so again....thank you, your responses sit kindly and softly in my heart |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Corazon-- this poem touched me more than you can imagine...i sometimes feel like this too...like nothing fits where it should anymore and i have no clue as to what the next day is going to hold for me. you captured your feelings both brilliantly and beautifully in this piece...I really admire your style of writing! great poem!! take care, amy ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~ |
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