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My Immortal Beloved
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My Immortal Beloved |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
My Immortal Beloved Without you, I am despair Come to me from masked curtain In deathblow, we, the perfect pair Relieve my heart, and bestow your burden I offer myself, let it be your denote Take me; end my inner jousted affair Sink fangs of ecstasy to throat Let me be damned, hear my prayer I am your wilting flower On me, I beg you… feed Give me your gift, the power Implant the black magic, I am your seed Drain my very essence from vein And give me mortal death With transfusion, my life sustain Kiss me, and suck my last breath ……. My immortal beloved Marina May 2000 |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Ooooh,, I love the way you write. Especially about this subject. Vampires have always been a fascination of mine. All my love, Jeffrey I lie awake in a world filled with dreams, but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Back to the top for those who may have missed this one. I lie awake in a world filled with dreams, but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep |
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aurora New Member
since 2000-05-10
Posts 9 |
Excellent work!!! I am fascinated by the passion and longing you have shown! Keep writing! Aurora |
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TerryW Senior Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 779Louisville, Mississippi, USA |
Oh, Marina~~~ You got me with this one -- I have long been a diehard fan of the Vampyrie - I love Anne Rice and have read everything she has written about the lovely masters of the night. You have such dark, ecstatic passion in this one -- it took my breath away!!!!!  Love Ya~ ~you reached inside, you touched my heart, and I am all the better for it~ Terry A. Woodson, Jr. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
WAY COOL poem Marina-girl. this is so well written. creative and imaginative. perfect imagery I bet your a fun first date  LOLgreat work here... take care, jm It's amazing How you make your face just like a wall How you take your heart and turn it off How I turn my head and you lose it all ... And it's unnerving How one move just puts me by myself There you go just trusting someone else Now I know I put us both through hell ... I'm not sayin That there was nothing wrong I just didn't think you'd ever get tired of me And I'm not sayin We ever had the right to hold on I just didn't wanna let you get away from me. ~MB20~Leave |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Marina~ This is so great! I like vampire stuff, but not "into" it....anyway, this was like watching it instead of reading it!Excellent! -SEA |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
Marina, really enjoying your writing. Seems to get better with each new post. ~~very nice!! DH |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
"Kiss me and suck my last breath". Now that sounds like my kind of kissing. I must have a little bit of vampire in my blood. This is an interesting mood. James |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Superb Marina, you are really stretching yourself these days. . . and doing very well. . . Excellent. . . -------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
loved the desire showed for the other, to suck up all the others love and energy. |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Jeffery, I am glad you liked it. It was fun to write. Thank you. Aurora, thank you very much Terry, Anne Rice defibiyely played a part in this one. I am almost done reading your series. Fasinating books indeed. Thank you for yout post. James, didn't you know I had you in mind when I wrote it??? LOL Danny what a sweet compliment for you to say. Thank you very, very much. Sea, thank you I'm glad you liked it. Jm, I6t is the funniest thing....I get lots of first dates but very many seconds, or thirds! They seem to " die off me" so quickly. Sven, my support when all else fails. Thank you, you know how much your words mean to me. Rodebud, thank you. Marina |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
Sounds like you've been reading the same Vampire novels I have girlie!!! You've done well with the subject, I assure you!!! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
devina, thanks. It seems everyone is into these books lately. Marina |
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