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jwesley
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
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0 posted 2000-05-10 06:02 PM


Sitting Here

Sitting here,
wondering,
thinking,
dreaming fairy tales I know  will never come true.
Standing on the seashore,
the wind blowing through my hair,
foamy waves advancing,
receding,
with my every step.
Seagulls,
crying for their songs to be heard,
songs they will never sing.
Happily,
enviably,
I watch them glide by.
Walking along the water's edge,
my footsteps marking my passage,
my body forging ahead,
continuing to carry my life,
and the sea,
surging round my feet,
cold,
yet warm,
caressing.
The sands of time falling,
marking a presence,
then where it once stood,
covering,
preserving,
remembering,
containing.
I wonder.
Will my mind ever snap
will I ever go berserk,
will I sit for hours on end,
for days that turn to years,
not knowing,
not caring,
never being aware again.
Oh God no.
Death is the better alternative.
But after death,
where to?
Heaven?
Hell?
Up?
Down?
That's not death.
That's release from life.
What happens to the grievances of the soul?
What happens?
Where does it end?

W. James Beard, Jr.



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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136
Mobile, AL
1 posted 2000-05-10 08:12 PM


You have a good poem here, but it kind of confuses me toward the end. It starts out so happily, and then ends in what seems a less happy way.   At any rate it was good.  

 Nothing can deter a poet, for he is actuated by pure love. Who can predict his comings and goings? "Thoreau"

SpitFire
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since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396

2 posted 2000-05-10 08:37 PM


~Oooh,...I've thought these thoughts....you ok?   This is a great expression with great imagery...well done.
REBECCA ALLYN
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since 2000-05-09
Posts 91
Lima,Ohio
3 posted 2000-05-10 08:39 PM


I like it,I like it a lot!!!
it's puts the picture right in your mind


LOT of LUV,
Becky

Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada
4 posted 2000-05-11 06:24 AM


Ahh, the mysterious questions I long for answers to myself ... nicely said James, very picturesque ...

Best wishes,
/Kit

CocoBaci
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since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043

5 posted 2000-05-12 09:44 PM


The expression in this poetry seemed to flow
Yet approaching the ending verse
My heart didn't know where to go.
Quite an intriguing form of poetry

CocoBaci

brian madden
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ireland
6 posted 2000-05-13 12:45 PM


Some times sitting alone gives you time to reflect but other times you just end up picking at the scabs and opening old wounds, at least this is what happens to me.

You poem had me lulled into a trance, sedated then at the end I was slapped with a words of sadness. It often happens when you let your thoughts wander. Nice natural free flowing poetry. Let your thoughts continue to run free.  

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