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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Hollow emptiness < !signature-->Echoes Through the chamber Of my heart. Cold Nothingness Warms my Tainted skin. Fingers Of lost hope Caress my skin As the darkness At last Settles in. When you are old and grey and full of sleep, And nodding by the fire, take down this book, And slowly read, and dream of the soft look Your eyes had once, and of their shodows deep; How many loved your moments of glad grace, And loved your beauty with love false or true, But one man loved the pilgrim soul in you, And loved the sorrows of your changing face... William Butler Yeats [This message has been edited by Marilyn (edited 05-08-2000).] |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
This one grabs ya, that's for sure Marilyn. God, I know this feeling. "Emotional Death" Trying to think of a title - maybe "numb". Good poem. Michael |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Marilyn~ This is so sadly written. It deserves a pretty title ... how about Echoes Of My Heart ? Great big *HUGS* to you. It is lovely ... though a heart-breaker. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
This packs a punch of sadness in a few short lines...how about "echoes" ? |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Wow, much said in few words...got to agree that this packs a punch. How about "Stone Cold Caress" |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Darkness Revisted? or Darkness An Old Friend? So sad Maz hugs from your Aussie sister  A heart and soul are not judged by how much you love, but by how much you are loved by others... ~Isis~ (Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Excellent poem, Marilyn. Very sad  How about 'Nothingness' or 'Echoes of Nothingness'?Denise |
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Dusk Treader
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Senior Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 1187St. Paul, MN |
Short, powerful poem Marilyn. The pain shines through in poetic beauty, I feel much the same... How about "Frozen Echoes" for a title? Abrahm Simons "You... You are so special You have the talent To make me feel like Dirt" - Alice in Chains, "Dirt" |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Powerful...how about "Echoes of an empty heart"? All my love, Jeffrey I lie awake in a world filled with dreams, but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
Hi Marilyn ... very sad poem you've written ... the only title that comes to mind is 'Echoe Chamber' Rex}>{{{{o> |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Michael...I know you can relate to this piece. It is something I never thought would happen to me. I wouldn't let myself get involved in something that would strike that final blow. It seems I was mistaken and have again felt emotional destruction. Maybe someday I will find something that will build me up instead of tearing me down. Until then I must cling to what can keep me a float. Marg..thankyou and thankyou for the title suggestion. Martie...Thanks for the input. Ruth...The inspiration for this took the wind right out of me...so I guess this should hit hard. Isis...thanks for the ideas my sister. And thanks for the ear. ((hug))Thankyou Denise...for everything and especially for your concern. ((hug)) Abe...I am glad that you could feel this. Jeffrey...Thanks for the input and for the kudo's. Rex....Writing is a way for me to empty my pain. I am glad it comes through in my words. |
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