Open Poetry #7 |
~ Echoes Within The Heart ~ |
CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
~ Echoes Within The Heart ~ I don't know why I sometimes cry Whenever I don't have you Beside me in your arms at night I don't know how you touched my heart It just happened all of a sudden When our eyes and lips discovered each other That moment in time under twilight sky I don't know what comes over me As you tenderly explore my form Such passionate fires and sensual desires Just seem to ravage me completely Like the aftermath of a storm One just gasps and sighs I don't know where this attraction will lead Just knowing one thing is for certain Today you are the world to me And tomorrow perhaps my fantasy. |
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bboog Member
since 2000-02-29
Posts 303Valencia, California |
Coco~ Nice honest portrait of feelings. Well done. bboog |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Coco, your heart really shows in this one. . . the heart echoes what the mind seeks to know. . . and answers back in sweet tones. . . Wonderful poem. . . -------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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netswan Senior Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369Washington |
Lovely, Coco ------enjoy --) netswan |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Your thoughts on this one I write Means a great deal to me .. I thank you Swan, Boog and Sven For taking this moment to enjoy it CocoBaci |
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Irie Senior Member
since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493Washington State |
Oh the Why, How, What and Where's! Isn't it amazing the feelings and questions that whirl around in our minds when we find someone that awakens our sences and emotions! I enjoyed this very much! |
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lorilockheart Member
since 2000-05-06
Posts 206Alabama |
CocoBaci, How nice it was to again enjoy your words. Really beautiful. Lori quote: |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
CocoBaci~ This is so tender. The nicest thing about echoes is they keep coming back. Your heartbeat is heard loud and clear in this piece. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Coco-- From one romantic to another...this was simply lovely! your writing has a beautiful honest style to it. I like it quite a bit! Me thinks you're pretty great..and this poem was also sensual and sweet at the same time..how u manage that?? lol take care, amy ) ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~ |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
IRIE .. thank you I am happi you liked it LORI .. you're a sweetie MARGE .. it's a compliment to me that you stopped by to read this one AMY .. feelings are likewise towards the poetry you write gurl Yet if there's one thing I would amend to this it would be .. ~ if only he heard the echoes ~ CocoBaci |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
As I promissed you. I can tell that you are writing with your heart in your hand Feeling after feeling just around the bend I love your style, the way your words take shape Beautiful, and surley love that no one can escape Well done Coco The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
"It just happened all of a sudden..when our lips and eyes discovered each other."..very lovely. James |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
HEMLUT ~ I appreciate your comments as it means alot to me that one's inked words transcend thru this screen and enable the reader to grasp one's feelings put in ink. JAMES ~ I was elated to see that you passed by this page to take a peak at this lil verse I happened to have wrote thank you for your thoughts. CocoBaci |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
Good poem!!!!!! |
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REBECCA ALLYN Member
since 2000-05-09
Posts 91Lima,Ohio |
This was awesome!! I keep reading it and reading it!! I really enjoy your work LOTS of LUV, Becky |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Vandana ~ I am pleased you like it Rebecca ~ Well gurl, its amazing how the wings of the mind have a way of expressing what is captured within the heart CocoBaci |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is a beautiful expression, Coco! Denise |
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