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hsystems Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 319Murray, UT, USA |
Words Mere words cannot move mountains, Nor calm the storm-tossed sea. They cannot cause the lame to walk, Nor make the blind man see. But, words have power to move the heart, And put its fears at bay; To make a crippled soul arise, And see the light of day. Words cannot subdue the wind, Nor stop the falling rain. They cannot cause the cloud-blocked sun To show its face, again. But, words can help hold back the tide, When storms of life rage on; And fill a weary spirit With the strength to carry on. -Troy J. Hoecherl- © Troy J Hoecherl All Rights Reserved Beautiful, Thought-Provoking Poetry http://www.h-systems.net/p1.htm |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
This is excellent, I love it. |
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David2 Member
since 2000-03-22
Posts 407 |
Troy, Your meter is excellent! Your emotions are evident as well. Good poem. David2  |
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Lone Ranger Member
since 2000-04-16
Posts 92Salvador , Bahia , Brazil |
WOW!!! Now what can I say about this?? Unbelivable? Amazing? Indescridable? I'm shure all them fits for this poem! Great work! "Only in the dreams , is that man can truly be free It was always thus and always thus will be" Prof. Keating Dead Poets Society |
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Lone Ranger Member
since 2000-04-16
Posts 92Salvador , Bahia , Brazil |
WOW!!! Now what can I say about this?? Unbelivable? Amazing? Indescridable? I'm sure all them fits for this poem! Great work! "Only in the dreams , is that man can truly be free It was always thus and always thus will be" Prof. Keating Dead Poets Society |
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netswan Senior Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369Washington |
Troy - you have out done yourself, this is a masterpiece ---Thank you, my friend so much for sharing AND OH so true. Big hugs from netswan |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Troy, Your writing is getting better every time you post. I love this piece, and I love you too man. Jeffrey |
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bboog Member
since 2000-02-29
Posts 303Valencia, California |
Troy, I liked this one but challenge you to work on the last two lines as they are the ones most people will remember. "Fill with the strength" sounds a little too much like a quick and dirty ending, don't you think? There are too many other good verbs and images that might fit. I think you have the talent to make this a little bit better, but you can always leave it as is, too. best regards, bboog |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Good poem, with good thoughts here. |
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hsystems Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 319Murray, UT, USA |
Lost Dreamer, David2, Lone Ranger - thanks for the lift! Glad you enjoyed it! Teresa - Thank you, my friend! That really means a lot, coming from you! {{{HUGS}}} Jeffrey - Whassup? Thanks for your kind comments - I love you, man! bboog - And I challenge YOU to leave the criticism in CA, where it belongs - think you're up to the challenge? Martie - thanks, I'm glad you liked it!  Troy Beautiful, Thought-Provoking Poetry http://www.h-systems.net/p1.htm |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
WOW... I really enjoyed this piece. The second read was even better than the first... The potential power of words is quite an astounding thing, isn't it?...  |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Troy, Truer word swere never spoken, my friend. Excellent poem!!!!! Thanks, I needed this today. Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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