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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California 
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SIGH Ambition I feel it swelling within me filling my lungs with love with life energy Aspiration soaring no boundaries no chains unto fullness of being ~pause~ Anxiety How can it be I can take no more in? This life I so love, this vigor endlessly encompassing me How can I be so limited in my indulgence so fragile in my expectation Fret not I shall cling to that which is mine. I shall be content in my portion not mingling with greed But no, even now I feel it starting to slip away, bleeding me of all gifts once presented me Why? CRASH The dream is grounded hope belied ambition donning the shackles of my own creation wounded waning now in memory ever ~ deflated ~ Michael Anderson [This message has been edited by Michael (edited 05-05-2000).] |
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Irie Senior Member
since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493Washington State |
Correct me if I'm wrong, But I feel a sense of confusion and emotions swirling out of control. A glimps of happiness, then feeling unsure to feeling empty. Well, this is what I have interpreted here, and I'm known to misinterpret much of the time. In anycase Michael, Well done...  ~Sheri [This message has been edited by Irie (edited 05-05-2000).] |
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Dawn Eclipse Senior Member
since 2000-01-31
Posts 637The Horsehead Nebula |
That was a beautiful poem, but somewhat sad. I enjoyed it very much.  "Even a fool knows you can't touch the stars, but it doesn't stop a wise man from trying." Harry Anderson, "Night Court" *Cassandra Roseen* |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
wow..this caught me off guard... its so rare you dont rhyme... I see your trying some new styles.. this one reminds me of a Chris poem in its presentation. yes? no? very cool M,(even if ya did crash)*smile* jm |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Ahh my dear friend. You are doing the pulling yourself back up thing. Once we think we might have some ground beneath us again it slips away. Don't worry dear heart, it will come. Each time you inflate you rise higher and more securely. Don't be afraid to let your friends support you. ((hug)) Well written as always. When you are old and grey and full of sleep, And nodding by the fire, take down this book, And slowly read, and dream of the soft look Your eyes had once, and of their shodows deep; How many loved your moments of glad grace, And loved your beauty with love false or true, But one man loved the pilgrim soul in you, And loved the sorrows of your changing face... William Butler Yeats |
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DiObear Member
since 2000-04-30
Posts 66Switzerland |
Michael, Like Janet Marie points out, this seems to be a different style for you. You must be gifted to be able to write so differently and so well. I especially liked the lines... 'so fragile in my expectation.' I think I've been guilty of that before. Sue |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
Michael, Touching, very touching. You are definitely blessed with soul. Heart felt my friend. Your writing is like the express way, your always on a curve. Nicely done. I love "donning"... Lucky< !signature--> If I could paint a portrait, of this life in which I've led, and somehow sketch a story, of the visions in my head, I'd start out with a canvas, stretched tightly in a frame, and in the bottom corner, I'd leave room to sign my name. (Michelle A. Bartley) [This message has been edited by lucky (edited 05-06-2000).] |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I can relate well to the angst here--but please--no CRASH--I've had enuff of that for one night...smile sometime today... |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
A wonderful piece of writing here, Michael....I am sure many can relate to this. Love and hugs, Lizzie "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight." |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
This is lightly done, has an open quality to it that I've not seen in your other work. I like it a lot (surprise?)....I hope you find that dream you search for....in the meantime your poetry touches so many who are in the same place as you...that's a good thing.  |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
I've seen a few different styles in your writing Michael .. each type I have enjoyed tremendously. This is a wonderful verse full of vivid emotions ... /Kit |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
Only you could manage to "crash" with such style m'dear.. Beautiful free verse too btw...Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
BTTT I lie awake in a world filled with dreams, but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep |
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netswan Senior Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369Washington |
Michael -----Your poems have been catching my eye - since I have joined. This is good -- though I have come to expect no less from you --- LIKE this style It is cool. YOU will get those feet on the ground. it is not too bad to take two steps forward and only slip back one -- in that way - you will get ahead ----one day you will surprise yourself and see you are going three feet forward and sliding back only one -------) Chin up Michael. Life throws us loops to make us grow up good and strong. netswan |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Michael, Great poem and love the format....very creative. Sadness, especially at the end. Great writing!! LW Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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Michael
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Sheri, you pretty much nailed it. It's from a feeling of soaring - feeling unconquerable - to a complete crash and feeling of despair I tried to relate here... well done on the analysis too...LOL Dawn Eclipse, I'm so glad you enjoyed this one. Janet, how dare you compare me with that scoundrel... well, I've never been so complimented in my life... Marilyn, hard to reinflate with holes in the lungs... but I try. Sue, I think we are all guilty of that at one point or another... Lucky, sometimes I think I'm not only runnin' the curve but grinding the rails as well... Glad you enjoyed my friend. serenity....  How's that?Lizzie, I hope so... that is why I write. PdV, thank you so much - truly was "experimental" for me. Glad you enjoyed. Kit - thank you so much. Devina, me thinks I had a little frost on the wings... with a little sun and warmth, who knows - maybe I'll be flying again soon... Jeffrey, ????...LOL netswan, Giving it my best shot...TY Lone Wolf,Sadness becomes me at times...LOL So glad you enjoyed... Thank you all for the kind replies. Michael |
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