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Nothing, Now Suffice |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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If there were but one drop of dew in rainbow field of sparkling hue, on hands and knees, beyond Pride's yield-- Know you, now--I would find you. I do not care for wishes, grant... However, sweet, is sweet romance... Bodies--all, they pass away. Forever--I have felt this way. You remain connecting piece to puzzle of eternity. My heart is but a sacrifice; and if I could, I'd offer twice-- "Receive this blade," the virgin prayed, "for nothing else, will now suffice..." |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
WOW, this one is splendid. What a wonderful caricature of a gift that is sacrifice! Expressed wonderfully well, serenity regards, sudhir Take each day as it comes, Consider each day as a flight, Try hard to succeed and fly, Surely then you will reach some height. But if by some chance you don’t, Remember that tomorrow will always come. Learn this well and learn this hard That today’s efforts will pay for tomorrow’s fun. A Crazy Monster, a.k.a Ski |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
My heart is but a sacrifice; and if I could, I'd offer twice-- "Receive this blade," the virgin prayed, "for nothing else, will now suffice..." --------------------- *on my knees...begging for mercy* (smile) WOW is right!!! ~SPLENDID~ is right... and add ~EXQUISITE~ AND ~ENCHANTING~!!! Girl...I could eat this one with a spoon like dessert!! this is SO perfect. I am taken by this poem's beauty and grace, serenity, truly. and once again you mirrored my heart. my my my...love you when your inspired  poetry in motion...you are. loves ya, jm [This message has been edited by Janet Marie (edited 05-02-2000).] |
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A.C.Turner Member
since 2000-04-30
Posts 83Reading, Pa.Home of Bardfest |
This is so moving. The rhyme is well done too. ACT. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Excellent writing, Serenity! Denise |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
This was awesome sis....go ahead and bow... Kickin last lines too girl!!! Love to ya hon!!!!~D Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Wonderful writing, Serenity! |
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DiObear Member
since 2000-04-30
Posts 66Switzerland |
This is great. I especially like the last three lines. DiObear |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
The first 4 lines made it magical, and it just kept getting better and better, and Wow what an ending! Delicately sweet this is. Loved it! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Serenity, Good words, cleverly put, good poem. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Thanks to all--don't know WHERE that one came from--a little May Day Madness I suppose--but thank you all for reading.. |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Wow... this is pure passion. Draws you in and then wham!!! What an ending... Scathing emotion, serenity. Love this one. Michael |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
very nice |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
All I can do is echo all the praises above and add my thank you for sharing this. Hold me for yesterday Kiss me for tomorrow But love me for today. |
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bobbycat Member
since 2000-02-06
Posts 233USA |
Beautiful poem....and I know about that May Day Madness all too well.  This flows like a lilting song, carefree and magical; I really enjoyed it.Bobbycat =^..^= |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Simply wonderful serenity. . . the passion and warmth can be felt in every line. . . Beautiful poem. . . -------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Recieve this blade... and a piercing blow it is! Delivered right from your words into my heart. You sure said a mouthful in a few words here! I'm not sure I even grasped all the nuances of this here poem, but I know that what I did catch blew me away! My, my, my you have a way! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Serenity is all aflush.... and glad she is, ye can't see blush... |
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