Open Poetry #7 |
The World Within |
desperado Member
since 1999-05-24
Posts 312FT Hood,Tx |
I heard your voice today and it took my breath away I saw the sparkle in your eyes and I remembered your silent cries I felt your body shake once more like it did the year before with your tears falling fast you thought the pain would always last but now you've found your dreams you've found the world before you it seems and I held you for just a flash and then my heart was turned to ash for my dreams were made with you in mind you saying goodbye was one I'd hope not find I held back those tears till the moment died denied myself till in the dark I cried still I'll never quite say goodbye and till I find another, perpetuate this lie but for now you'll always be mine a dream for me to wine and dine so one day I'll let you go I'll move on, yet you'll never know for my tears lie beneath the skin trapped for the world I have within |
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netswan Senior Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369Washington |
Desperado - this flows ---I like it a lot. netswan |
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bobbycat Member
since 2000-02-06
Posts 233USA |
How achingly sad....I've known this feeling all too well. This is a beautiful poem. Bobbycat =^..^= |
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Dawn Eclipse Senior Member
since 2000-01-31
Posts 637The Horsehead Nebula |
Beautiful poem, but so filled with saddness. That feeling is shown unto us all at one point. I enjoyed this poem very much! "Even a fool knows you can't touch the stars, but it doesn't stop a wise man from trying." Harry Anderson, "Night Court" *Cassandra Roseen* |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Desperado~ Somewhere tonight a heart is aching ... This is very sensitively done. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
hey, des... this poem's HOT! Lemme ask you this... when you were trying to win this girl's heart, did you invite her to stay at the Hotel Clositito? Maybe you shoulda.. heard it was some kinda cool... small, intimate, and close to all the important sites. seriously, babe.. loved this! you're the poetman! |
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desperado Member
since 1999-05-24
Posts 312FT Hood,Tx |
thanks you guys. I appreciate it. I'm fixing to disappear once again, this time for only about two-three weeks, hopefully. by then I should have a computer, internet, and all that stuff. hehe God Bless! "There were times in my life when I was going insane tryin to walk through the pain when I lost my grip and I hit the floor yeah I thought I could leave but couldn't get out the door" - Aerosmith "Amazing" |
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WhiteNite Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 241Montgomery, AL |
I'll move on, yet you'll never know for my tears lie beneath the skin trapped for the world I have within ----------------------------------- Wow. I loved those last lines... the rest was cool too, but those last lines really drove it home. "Don't let your character get camoflaged with your environment. Find who you are and let it stay in its true colors." --Rachel Joy Scott |
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