Open Poetry #7 |
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To Feel the Song Once More |
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warmhrt Senior Member
since 1999-12-18
Posts 1563![]() |
I am feeling so very lonely, I just need someone to hold me, To rock me gently through the night, To tell me everything's alright, To wrap me up in fantasy, Take me riding on soft breeze, With a soft and playful tease, Let me feel the rising flow, As it passes the plateau, Slowly dropping to an ease, Feeling warmth once more within, As the sun opens the door, To sweet songs of violins, Till I feel their song once more. warmhrt |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is very beautifully done, Warmhrt! The emotion in this is so well expressed! Denise |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
yep, very well done, and yes I know just what you mean, I feel it too |
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warmhrt Senior Member
since 1999-12-18
Posts 1563 |
Denise (Congrats!) and Corazon, To you both: Thank you for reading, and for your kind comments. |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Boy do I need this too! I think we as adults forget the comfort we can get from being held like this..like a child. ![]() |
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Marge Tindal![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
WarmHeart~ Oh, yeah ... the magic of being held and gently rocked is so soothing. Very nicely done. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
May you find everything you are looking for. This was filled with need and with longing...you touched my heart with this. Hold me for yesterday Kiss me for tomorrow But love me for today. |
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warmhrt Senior Member
since 1999-12-18
Posts 1563 |
PoetdeVine, Marge, and Butterflies, I very much appreciate you three taking the time to read, and to post a comment.Since the comments were so positive, I also say a gracious thank-you. |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi warmhrt, You have song beautiful words here, very much enjoyed this. Cerenity |
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warmhrt Senior Member
since 1999-12-18
Posts 1563 |
Thank-you serenity, but I don't think the words are what evokes the images. I normally use simple, everyday words, and attempt to phrase them in a manner which will convey the pictures I would like the readers to see. I'm glad you think it works here. |
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