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wordancer
Senior Member

since 2000-07-30

Posts 809
VA

0 posted 2002-04-11 12:14 PM

Three crones from the Barren Hills
so named Rachel, Mary and Eve;
tired and fraught with long life
decided to end the reign of man
and his wars and hate and greed.
Thus and so they traveled down
to fish in the brineless sea,
to stalk the old man of the lake
who swallowed world into the dark
so many years ago.

Under the waxing night; silver hooks
were baited with scrawny chicken necks,
rotted gizzards and livers,
and secret woman things cast
forth from lunar tides
jarred by the dark of the moon.
Rachel, Mary, and Eve
were patient in their wait throughout
the endless revolving seasons,
for there was time in this no time,
as they sat and chat about this and that.
About how the world could be
without the wars, pain and greed.
A new time turned out in hope,
love, and rooted compassion.

After eons of shifting tides,
breaking stones and crashing waves,
the  old whiskered man of the lake
unable to resist the bloody lure,
and bite with a huge greedy gulp
to be pulled forth from the ebony pool
flopping on the ground of reality.
Rachel gouged out his one orb.
(if thy left eye offends thee-pluck it out)
Eve gouged out his second orb.
(if thy right eye offends thee-pluck it out)
And Mary, being brave and bold
slitted the heaving gut of mankind
to pluck forth the swirled blue marble,
to swallow it whole and then she dove
into the deep brineless sea.

On the shore, under the light
in a moment of  flashing green
Rachel and Eve joined hands
to dance the dance of beginnings,
to sing hosannas in the new  dawn
to plait with joyful hands a stairway of hope
as the  land's tilted planes trembled
and the earth reverse revolution
as Mary in the bottomless depths gave birth
to a brave new world-set free.

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pegasus111
Member Elite

since 2000-07-27

Posts 2219
ocala, fl, usa

1 posted 2002-04-11 01:25 PM

a lovely fantasy dancer. It is interesting that the ogre in this plot is male and the saviors of the world are female. Maybe God should have pulled the rib from Adam, made Eve, and thrown the rest away....

the woods are lovely, dark, and deep, but I have promises to keep, and many miles to go before I sleep...Frost

Joyce Johnson

Member Rara Avis

since 2001-03-10

Posts 9912
Washington State

2 posted 2002-04-11 10:32 PM

Very vivid imaginative poem. I liked Pegasus deduction also. Joyce

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