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Irish Rose
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since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

0 posted 2001-05-21 03:46 PM

Once it's gone, it's gone
and the morning joy is dust
you sing, you sing a song
of love and death and trust

Go on, scream and be as blind
as a score before you were
but please, in deed, be kind
it's just a lie you know.

Take some grace and style
from the sisters of the fold
reflect a stronger smile
refine yourself in gold.

Once it's gone, it's gone
oh, yes, it's true my dear
and somehow you belong
to each and every tear.

For many fish are in the sea
but you have the last laugh
for you escaped, the test you see
you're now safe in the past.

You'll always be remembered
as the one he couldn't have
so leave him now, dismembered
a fraction of the half.

(This is just fantasy, I didn't dump anyone!)
Kathleen Blake

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee

[This message has been edited by Irish Rose (edited 05-21-2001).]

ellie LeJeune
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since 2000-01-10

Posts 4156
King of Prussia, PA USA

1 posted 2001-05-21 08:44 PM

oooo, this is interesting and well written. I'm glad he got dumped, not good enough for you, you deserve better! Ellie

A friend hears the song in my heart, and sings it to me when my memory fails.

Xeonox

Senior Member

since 2000-04-01

Posts 1764
CA, USA

2 posted 2001-05-22 01:13 AM

nice poem. I especially enjoy the following stanza.

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Once it's gone, it's gone
oh, yes, it's true my dear
and somehow you belong
to each and every tear
_________________________________

Ronil (One becomes god only when they have fully understood the role of being a human being.)

Joyce Johnson

Member Rara Avis

since 2001-03-10

Posts 9912
Washington State

3 posted 2001-05-22 02:10 AM

I like this a lot. And he probably deserved it, your turndown, even though it's all a fantasy. Joyce

Trillium

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since 2001-03-09

Posts 12098
Idaho, USA

4 posted 2001-05-22 05:16 PM

This was fun to read. He'll always regret the one that got away, even in fantasy.

Betty Lou Hebert

Lone Wolf
Member Ascendant

since 2000-03-16

Posts 5842
Lansing, MI USA

5 posted 2001-05-22 07:58 PM

True or not, I like it!!! Very nice writing!!

All writing comes
by the grace of God.
-Ralph Waldo Emerson

Denise

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since 1999-08-22

Posts 22648

6 posted 2001-05-22 08:55 PM

...but what an excellent way to dump someone *giggles* Great poem, Kathleen!

Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

7 posted 2001-05-23 03:10 AM

I'm with Denise *hehe*

I enjoyed!

Maree

Irish Rose
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since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

8 posted 2001-05-23 11:40 AM

thank you for your kind replies, for some reason, I really enjoyed writing this one!

Kathleen Blake

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee

brian madden
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since 2000-05-06

Posts 4374
ireland

9 posted 2001-05-23 01:39 PM

enjoyed the read Kathleen

"across the unfair divide
where black will never meet white
so read my token lips
like they never exist"

nicky wire

ShadowLost
Junior Member

since 2001-06-23

Posts 43

10 posted 2001-06-25 02:12 PM

Quite realistic "DUMPING" even if it was written in fantasy. I enjoyed reading this.....it was fun.

~ShadowLost~

...and now these three things remain: faith, hope and love. But, the greatest of these is love. 1 Corinthians 13.13

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