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Silent Prisoner
Junior Member

since 2006-02-15

Posts 39
Around Somewhere

0 posted 2006-02-15 07:06 PM

Trapped with in the hollow walls
sits a lost and cold little girl
she's been abandoned in this place
and no one remembers where she's gone
on each wall there is written in chalk
the amount of time she's been here
1,095 tallies mark the walls
one for everyday that has been spent alone
no porole for her will be lent
only 547 tallies left to serve.
no one sees her not even a guard
the sound of her voice has become
but a distant dream
human contact has become an illsion
life wasn't supposed to end up this way
she'd had so many plans
and things that will never be completed
so for now she will just continue as she is
a silent prisoner in her silent pen.

FNG
Member

since 2006-02-07

Posts 477

1 posted 2006-02-20 01:24 AM

Enjoyed your poem.

I like it very much.

Yu Lan
Senior Member

since 2000-04-13

Posts 1462
New Zealand

2 posted 2006-04-01 05:44 AM

Hi

Yeah, a lonely one this one..
I was interested; do the numbers have any significance? Are they just numbers?

-Lynne

midnightblues
Senior Member

since 2000-07-01

Posts 1597
Singapore

3 posted 2006-04-01 05:48 AM

Dear SP,

I like your poetry

It is very modern yet so poetic, wish I could do that too!

Love,
MiCheLLe

If there cannot be equal in affection, then let the one with more be me - midnightblues

Joyce Johnson

Member Rara Avis

since 2001-03-10

Posts 9912
Washington State

4 posted 2006-04-01 11:03 AM

this is very sad and thought provoking. Is this an abused child? An autistic child?
A senile old lady trapped in her childhood memories? Could be many reasons for her isolation. Joyce

the_hoodANDsheild
Junior Member

since 2006-03-08

Posts 25
Canada

5 posted 2006-04-01 10:31 PM

I really liked this poem...i can tell that you thought alot about your words. I love reading poems that make you think, and this certaintly made me do this. Thank-you.

Silent Prisoner
Junior Member

since 2006-02-15

Posts 39
Around Somewhere

6 posted 2006-04-02 11:16 AM

This is actually about a high school student. The tally marks represent the days spent and the days that are left to go. Thanks for the compliments on my style. Most people don't like when I write in the story form but I feel that it makes certain poems come alive. Thank you all.

"It's not the letting go that hurts, it's the holding on."

Roberta Little
Junior Member

since 2001-12-18

Posts 42
beloit wi usa

7 posted 2006-04-10 03:04 PM

i enjoyed your piece very much. its similur to the style i use. its nice to see another person who writes story like and not always in rhyme.
good job.

GOD's greatist gift is LOVE

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