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mistyrose
Member

since 2001-04-21

Posts 75
state of anxiety

0 posted 2001-05-19 03:49 AM

take me from this madness
called life
and place me
in your heart
i want
to see things through
your sad,
little boy eyes
put me in the country
teach me
the sounds of
the night
save me
from this madness
and help me
rebuild
my life.....

Packratmike
Senior Member

since 2001-02-25

Posts 632
California, USA

1 posted 2001-05-19 12:49 PM

Very emotional and longing. Excellent, mistyrose.

Mike

Denise

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-08-22

Posts 22648

2 posted 2001-05-19 01:05 PM

Very well done! The longing comes through well in these words!

Joyce Johnson

Member Rara Avis

since 2001-03-10

Posts 9912
Washington State

3 posted 2001-05-20 01:28 AM

I feel the emotion and longing, but it is asking a lot of another. Joyce

[This message has been edited by Joyce Johnson (edited 05-20-2001).]

mistyrose
Member

since 2001-04-21

Posts 75
state of anxiety

4 posted 2001-05-20 06:25 PM

thanks so much for your comments
i had a revelation today regarding this poem
that i hope will transcend itself into
yet another poem.... maybe someday

joyce..on a personal note notice i asked for help in the rebuilding
sometimes the strength of a trusted love one helping lends itself
to enpowering the weaker link....just my thoughts and thanks

mistyrose~*

brian madden
Member Elite

since 2000-05-06

Posts 4374
ireland

5 posted 2001-05-21 04:03 PM

misty I hope that he said yes and gave you a refuge from the madness of life. We all need somewhere special and some one special. well written.

"across the unfair divide
where black will never meet white
so read my token lips
like they never exist"

nicky wire

Red_Feather
Member

since 2001-01-19

Posts 131
The Vagabond Sea

6 posted 2001-05-21 10:00 PM

"teach me the sounds of the night"...i love this line. The night sounds have always lent me comfort. I sometimes hike throught the forest at night. It is exhilarating to be amongst those sounds, and to rely on hearing them... because you can't see them.

One's not half two it's two are halves of one EE Cummings

Trillium

Member Patricius

since 2001-03-09

Posts 12098
Idaho, USA

7 posted 2001-05-22 05:27 PM

This is very poignant and has some lovely word flow in it. Good job.

Betty Lou Hebert

Moon Dust

Member Elite

since 1999-06-11

Posts 2177
Skelmersdale, UK

8 posted 2001-05-22 06:45 PM

ah some thing we all want in a nice little verse

Don't ever give in, if you do you've lost everything you've ever had and everything you hope to gain, but if you carry on your already winning.

Dark Angel
Member Patricius

since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

9 posted 2001-07-23 06:53 PM

save me
from this madness
and help me
rebuild
my life.....

Great lines mistyrose and a great poem too

I enjoyed

Maree

"little miss understood
little misunderstood"

~Marry me Jane~

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