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jjote
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since 2002-12-25

Posts 1088
Ontario, Canada

0 posted 2005-01-23 11:17 PM

(I am trying to conjure the Muse of poetry to inspire me to write again..)

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I go in search of an elusive Muse.
Her flight has left my vessels cracked and dry.
Shafts of moonlight bathing o’er savannah,
radiates  no mist of magic in my mind.

‘Twas in savannah where once lived my Muse.
We danced to music  beat on wildest drums,
and from my pen  the words cascaded out
like rapids overflowing earthen jars.

One morning I awoke to find her gone,
no trace of shadow weaving through savannah.
In  mysterious chambers she may lie
disinterred or in slumber in some tomb.

I beg the wind to shout out loud her name,
my dying voice just floating weak and faint.
The ghost of flick’ring embers flash in vain
to light a path somehow for her to find.

But she insensitive and without mercy
moves no more my spirit oh so bleak.
Now my pen drags words like pulling weeds,
as  darkness settles hopeless on savannah.

TexUS
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since 2003-03-20

Posts 228

1 posted 2005-01-29 12:56 PM

Beautifully written.

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

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Listening to every heart

2 posted 2005-02-11 03:36 PM

Is savannah a place, a wilderness? Or a city/town? If the latter, then I would suggest capitalizing the word. If not, then ignore my suggestion.

It's a good piece...it likes me a lot, especially since my own muse has been known to traipse around a bit itself...

Yes, a very nice piece.

Joyce Johnson

Member Rara Avis

since 2001-03-10

Posts 9912
Washington State

3 posted 2005-02-12 02:15 PM

Dear Jjote, This happens to the best of us
and we just have to bide our time. She will be back. Well written. Love, Joyce

tecoyah
Member

since 2003-11-16

Posts 83
NY

4 posted 2005-02-12 03:22 PM

It would seem she lies within that which you have just written....perhaps hiding between forced lines. For the Muse is never truly lost once she has become a part of you....she simply, dwells.

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

5 posted 2005-02-14 01:05 PM

oh yes...I do understand!

jjote
Senior Member

since 2002-12-25

Posts 1088
Ontario, Canada

6 posted 2005-02-19 08:23 PM

Thanks everyone, tell the truth after I posted this poem, I ran and hid myself in a mental cabinet.

So when I peeked again to find you all responding, I heaved a big smile - so I'm not the only one with a runaway muse.

I'll go chase after her again, maybe.

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