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msflame
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since 2002-05-21

Posts 188

0 posted 2004-08-23 10:34 AM

Ants crawl on the pavement
outside my store and the same old man
sells carnations.

I'll be here until five o'clock,
waiting for you.  I'd like to apologize,
hold your hand.

When you first walked into my store,
I didn't hear the bell.  You said you
loved books so much, you could never
be a literary critic.

Please come back.  Its picnic season.
we have pages to turn and the book store
is closing.

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

1 posted 2004-08-23 10:55 AM

Penny~
This is just a wonderful penning~
You transported me there on your word-carpet~
Muchly enjoyed~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

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msflame
Member

since 2002-05-21

Posts 188

2 posted 2004-08-23 10:56 AM

Thank you. I adore books.

Joyce Johnson

Member Rara Avis

since 2001-03-10

Posts 9912
Washington State

3 posted 2004-08-23 10:58 AM

I really, really enjoyed this poem. It is pared to the essential but leaves me wanting more. Thanks and welcome to this corner. Joyce

PatAngel
Member

since 2004-04-05

Posts 451
California

4 posted 2004-08-23 11:04 AM

Penny,

What a wonderful poem! I really enjoyed reading it. Thank you for sharing.

Patricia,

'When you find a dream within your heart, don't ever let it go.
For dreams are the tiny seeds from which tomorrow grows.'

Beasley
Senior Member

since 2003-11-28

Posts 682
Cheboygan,MI USA

5 posted 2004-08-23 01:58 PM

I love your writing style. Neat!
Barb

msflame
Member

since 2002-05-21

Posts 188

6 posted 2004-08-23 04:25 PM

Thank you all so very much for the kind replies.

gringakiwi
Member

since 2003-08-05

Posts 189

7 posted 2004-08-23 11:54 PM

cool! there is something unmistakeably "billy collins" about this! love your style, and the observation of the everyday is wonderful, you make it exciting to read. (and good luck with this particular circumstance!)

msflame
Member

since 2002-05-21

Posts 188

8 posted 2004-08-24 09:43 AM

Thank you and you warm my heart. No circumstance, simply a metaphor working its way out! Blessings!

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
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9 posted 2004-08-24 12:40 PM

I love this!

msflame
Member

since 2002-05-21

Posts 188

10 posted 2004-08-24 06:38 PM

You do? That's terrific. Thank you for the kind feedback!

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