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wings of the moon
Member

since 2003-03-27

Posts 323
Pink bubblegum land

0 posted 2004-05-02 07:37 AM

I plucked the daisy.
If the feathers fall i might still have yellow-
butter to press my steps into.

It can't keep collapsing.

People make geometric shapes as they walk,
and see me in the glass.
I shall kiss, rip, smudge lipstick on that magazine cover.
and see me in the glass.

For my eyes are bludgeoning plastics, you smile,
I run.

And they collapse around me.

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sorry for poem-post-crossing, i just thought afterwards, that the poem would be better suited in this forum...

Street Heart
Member

since 2002-09-05

Posts 349
Pennsylvania,USA

1 posted 2004-06-01 02:29 AM

Claire,what an imagination you have! Very cryptic yet visual,surreal.Sure would like to know the thoughts which led you to this writing.I always look for "The Different". You most certainly fed me a refreshing change from "The Norm".Sometimes those everyday words and phrases that are used in most writings...well,let's just say that things that are described with a unique perspective or phrasing hold my interest and, hopefully,make me think a bit.I can only take so much of "Roses are red...", and,"The moon glows bright.",until I yawn myself into a stupor.Still,there is much to be said for clarity,at least a slice.Never- the-less,I enjoyed your offering here.

Street Heart

If a man has not discovered something he is willing to die for,his life is not worth living.

Martin Luther King,Jr. Detroit,1963

midnightblues
Senior Member

since 2000-07-01

Posts 1597
Singapore

2 posted 2004-06-01 03:11 AM

Hi Claire,

this is so unique

niCe

Love
MiCheLLe

If there cannot be equal in affection, then let the one with more be me - midnightblues

wings of the moon
Member

since 2003-03-27

Posts 323
Pink bubblegum land

3 posted 2004-06-01 02:03 PM

Street Heart - firstly thank you very much. i rather enjoy everyday things, mundane words, there's a certain beauty to them. i think of virginia wolf especially and those modernists that make "normal" stuff sound so beautiful, "a match burning in a crocus" for example, had me in ecstasy for a couple of days...

and midnight blues, thank you too for your lovely remarks. my heart is positively glowing

claire xx

Marge Tindal