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Laicie Junior Member
since 2003-12-03
Posts 37Australia |
Spring’s here, Mum, thought you’d like to know The freesias and forget-me-nots are all on show, The deep velvet fragrances fill my dreams They darken & deaden all my screams. The memories of when I was a child Frangipani growing strong & wild, Hide & seek in the big plum tree The hammock Dad made just for me. Eating lunch on our old, squeaky swing Spaghetti in sauce was my favourite thing, The sun beating down on my innocent heart How quickly a life can be ripped apart. Because then I awake to the coming storm And know the dream was nice and warm, My childhood, my mother, my love, my life Is gone . I know He’s kind, I know He’s just He knows love doesn’t fall to dust, Love survives and love remains Reminds us of all our worldly pains. It’s hard, but I try and understand The lives that He has eternally planned, Pain lives & breathes in my eternal soul So I spit it out and it swallows me whole. I’ve planted freesias & frangipanis Tried to put up with peoples insanities, And when the stress gets all too much I breathe their fragrance and feel your touch. I miss you Mum, I’ve told you before But I’m not sure you hear through that stained glass door, So I sleep & dream, till my mind is hoarse, Of frangipanis, freesias and spaghetti in sauce, Of hammocks in plum trees….of Mum on a swing This is my very best favourite thing Those who love deeply Never grow old; |
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NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470A Mountain Paradise |
A beautiful write and how I wish Spring was here in New England. We got 27 inches of snow over the weekend!!! Enjoyed this, Marti 'You cannot shake hands with a clenched fist.' |
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Laicie Junior Member
since 2003-12-03
Posts 37Australia |
Thanks, Marti, Where I am in Australia, the closest I get to snow is defrosting my long ignored freezer!! I suppose the grass is always greener, hey? Merry Christmas to you and yours, Laicie  Those who love deeply Never grow old; |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
beautiful but sad |
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SharaRose Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2501Somewhere out there~ |
hehehe..I know what you mean about favorite things, and about the freezer being the closest you get to snow...good one...thanks for the giggle about the freezer, and this wonderful write about mothers, and dads touch. I don't know alot about that, but I can see how uplifting it would be. Love, Terri~  Well I will go down with this ship |
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Trillium 
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
Laicie: I was really touched by your poem. Very well done! Enjoy your spring and think about some of us in the frozen parts of the world! Happy Holidays! Betty Lou Hebert |
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Laicie Junior Member
since 2003-12-03
Posts 37Australia |
passing shadows, SharaRose & Trillium, Thanks guys, I was a bit nervous posting here, being my first time, but you've made it a lot easier than I thought! Happy Hols to you all, and it's boiling hot here in Oz at the moment! (Think I'll stick my head in said freezer!!)   Those who love deeply Never grow old; |
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cusick Senior Member
since 2003-07-27
Posts 668 |
I was so affected by this. Of course your mother hears you. I think this is my best read for a while. Maggie |
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inot2B Member Elite
since 2000-09-18
Posts 2205Arkansas |
Words straight from your heart, so beautiful. Enjoyed your flowers and warm sun. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Beautiful words so very much enjoyed. Hugs~ ~ Let peace begin with me... |
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Laicie Junior Member
since 2003-12-03
Posts 37Australia |
Maggie, inot2B and Enchantress, Thanks so much for your comments. I didn't think this would get as many comments as it has! Maggie, I know my mum hears me, but sometimes it gets hard not having her wisdom and experience around. I guess we all go through that sometimes though, don't we? Thanks again, guys! Laicie Those who love deeply Never grow old; |
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pictureme Member
since 2003-11-28
Posts 248Ohio, USA |
This poem brought tears to my eyes and made me go hug my mum! . I loved the flowery images and scents so sweetly said! A bitter sweet read. WEll done and emotionally written and received!pictureme :-) |
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Laicie Junior Member
since 2003-12-03
Posts 37Australia |
Thanks pictureme, I tried making it bittersweet, so I suppose it worked! We don't know what we've got til it's gone. Those who love deeply Never grow old; |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
   (big hugggsssssss) God Bless You, sweet friend, and know always that your mom and dad and loved ones will always love you and will never forgot those timeless memories of plum tree hammock swinging or even getting sauce stains after having spaghetti for supper on your shirt, this is precious, I send angel hugs your way, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Laicie, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "You'll find something that's enough to keep you But if the bright lights don't receive you You should turn yourself around and come back home" MB20 [This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (12-13-2003 01:34 PM).] |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
This is very beautiful and sad too. You have a special talent with words and I can tell it comes from the heart. I look forward to reading more of your poetry. Good job! Deb |
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Laicie Junior Member
since 2003-12-03
Posts 37Australia |
Noah & Deb, Thankyou so much for your beautiful messages!I love the pictures, Noah. They're wonderful. I know Mum will be with me this Christmas, but it's good to hear it from someone else, too. I hope you both have a very happy Christmas, and all the days following. Laicie  Those who love deeply Never grow old; |
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jaicie114 Senior Member
since 2003-09-27
Posts 750On the edge of forever |
Laicie... (nice username -- I've seen another around a lot like it!) Welcome to PiP...and bravo on this incredible first post. Very, very nice images. Thank you for sharing. I look forward to more of your work. Love and Light...jc This I know as Truth...we are all Beings of Light. |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
This is beautiful - that last line is an absolute killer.. and you use so much vivid detail that I can almost remember your memories.. The love in this poem is so strong, and it was a pleasure to read Laicie Bless your cotten sockies, you poetic maniacs. ^_^ |
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Laicie Junior Member
since 2003-12-03
Posts 37Australia |
Jaicie, I'm thinking of changing my name to Laicie114,whaddya think? lol. Hey, thanks for looking at my poem. I know it's not as good as all the comments I'm getting here. I have a lot to work on, and I'm thinking of putting it in the Critical Forums to find out for myself! Who knows..maybe I'll hone it some! ?  Those who love deeply Never grow old; |
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Laicie Junior Member
since 2003-12-03
Posts 37Australia |
Yu Lan, Thanks so much for your wonderful comments! I wanted to show AND feel in this poem. I hope I've done that. My childhood was the best thing that's ever happened to me. I'm thankful for that, so I wanted to show people how much it meant to me. It's hard with a personal poem to show and not just 'tell', but I'm trying to get past the personal (in a way) and get into the 'interpersonal'.if you know what I mean! Thanks again! Cheers, Laicie Those who love deeply Never grow old; |
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jaicie114 Senior Member
since 2003-09-27
Posts 750On the edge of forever |
Hey, Laicie! I certainly think that the "114" could possibly add a bit of intrigue to your userid...but, then...I just may be a tad biased! And...it could really work for you if your birthday is Jan 14th like mine!!! LOLAbout your comments regarding your poetry...always, always, always be proud of your work. Sure...post something in the critical area if you want to polish it...but, writing should always be from the heart and is a gift we give ourselves...and, occasionally share with a few hundred (thousand?) friends if we choose to post! But, never apologize for your work or think it's not as good as someone else's. The fact that it comes from your heart makes it perfect...just the way it is. Okay...that's just my opinion...but, I sorta like thinking that way!!! Love and Light...jc This I know as Truth...we are all Beings of Light. |
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Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas |
A very lovely tribute to one loved and missed. Life only ends when all the ripples that person created cease to stir the waters of Creation. |
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Laicie Junior Member
since 2003-12-03
Posts 37Australia |
jaicie, Thanks for your encouragement.I honestly didn't think it would get so many replies! I've seen so many excellent poems at this site, it's overwhelming! If I changed my name to my birth date it would read Laicie1023. Sounds like something from a cop radio!!lol  Alicat, Thanks so much for your wonderful words! They were very meaningful. I think I'm going to like it here!  Those who love deeply Never grow old; |
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