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HawkeyePierce New Member
since 2003-08-17
Posts 1 |
Immortality The veil of deception collapsing, Injured by the perception of humanity. The scale shifting, balance interrupted. Life: the perpetual lie -- a malleable falsity. A universe of abstracts and mendacity. Engulfed by disease, perplexed by ambition. Death: the inevitable outcome -- An inescapable expiration. The evolved dispersion of the individual. Eternity is tempting. |
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PointlesS Junior Member
since 2003-07-27
Posts 21Oconomowoc, Wisconsin |
I like it...may there be more good ones like this to come  |
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Trillium 
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
HawkeyePierce: Welcome to the site and hope you will enjoy being a member of the Passions in Poetry group. There are many fine poets here and I can see by your post, your work will be a great addition! Enjoy the site. Watch for a special e-mail! Trillium Betty Lou Hebert |
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cusick Senior Member
since 2003-07-27
Posts 668 |
This is a little pessimistic although it doesn't detract from the message. Enjoyed rhe read. Welcome. Maggie |
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majnu
since 2002-10-13
Posts 1088SF Bay Area |
hey hawkeye welcome to pip - i love the callsign. the poem was well done. i did not find it pessimistic but rather realistic. eternity may be tempting but ask an elf - it can have its drawbacks. -majnu |
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gringakiwi Member
since 2003-08-05
Posts 189 |
I wish I was 8 years old again, when I thought that I would live forever..... so harshly realistic......what a great poem. Keep 'em comin! |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (sigh) I too agree this sounds pessimistic but nevertheless you write from the heart and thus this makes quite a wonderful debut, sweet friend, death is inevitable but life is grand for us all to behold, God Bless You! Welcome to Passions, sweet friend, may you be inspired by all of us here as we will all be inspired by your lovely words! I can't wait to read more of your heartfelt poetry, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth |
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