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Dark Journey

cusick
Senior Member

since 2003-07-27

Posts 668

0 posted 2003-08-05 06:09 AM

DARK JOURNEY

No turning back.
The cage door's closed.
Down we plummet,
faster than my heart beat.

Are we rising?
It's an illusion.
Downwards,
close to hell.

Cage unlocked
we meet our mentor,
urging men to
watch their language.

Under tunnels,
deep dark places.
Shining teeth in
blackened faces.

Tour has ended,
back to daylight.
On a sigh
I breathe amen.

Discarding lamp,
boots and knee pads.
Unique experience but
I'll never go down that again.

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

1 posted 2003-08-05 09:40 PM

Maggie~
This was so real, I felt my claustrophobia sneaking up on me~

Now THAT's good writing~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
[email protected]

Joyce Johnson

Member Rara Avis

since 2001-03-10

Posts 9912
Washington State

2 posted 2003-08-06 08:23 PM

I thought you were a miner but you say you'll never go down again. I followed you down and I'll never go there again either. Good job. Joyce

gringakiwi
Member

since 2003-08-05

Posts 189

3 posted 2003-08-07 09:05 AM

I have never been so terrified by reading a poem! yes, I too am claustrophobic.... great job!

cusick
Senior Member

since 2003-07-27

Posts 668

4 posted 2003-08-08 09:14 AM

Thank you all. This happened a few years ago in one of the deepest pits in Yorkshire UK. Good thing you wern't there, we had to go down on our knees going under very shallow tunnels in boiler suite hard hat and big boot. Maggie

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