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BrokenWingedAngel
Member

since 2003-02-28

Posts 60

0 posted 2003-07-24 12:57 PM

I showed you me tonight
Layed her out bare
No frills, no smiles, no lies
Do you still care?

Hesitant, she stepped up
Opened the darker soul
A part no one sees
Once again, to play the fool

And now I'll wait, I think
For the distance to form
Tears still build up
A never ending storm

I know you wanted to know
So I showed you all I could
Waiting to be cut down
Like so many trees in the woods

There was a once upon a time
Childish hope burned bright
But it was replaced long ago
By the barest flicker of light

Now everything's laid on the line
Nightmares, fears, dreams, hates
Will the hope be fed more fuel?
Or is it once again, "too litte, too late"....

I awake to a world I don't want. There is no transition for me. I am in heaven. I am in hell.

[This message has been edited by BrokenWingedAngel (07-24-2003 01:00 AM).]

missmisery61
Member

since 2003-07-08

Posts 56

1 posted 2003-07-24 11:08 AM

It's so hard to open oursleves up to people sometime, I guess for the fear of rejection. I have a bad habit of always trying to protect myself. Maybe not always a good thing. Your poem got me thinking, I really enjoyed it.

2dalimit
Member Elite

since 2000-02-08

Posts 2228
Mississippi coast

2 posted 2003-07-24 01:58 PM

...Now everything's laid on the line
Nightmares, fears, dreams, hates...

This is the honest thing to do. Now, let the chips fall.

Melton

[This message has been edited by 2dalimit (07-24-2003 06:02 PM).]

He who talks to the dead
Junior Member

since 2003-07-08

Posts 30
Newport, United Kingdom

3 posted 2003-07-24 03:41 PM

Hope is never dead while we breath, I hope the answers were what you needed Bunny.

SharaRose
Member Elite

since 2003-07-19

Posts 2501
Somewhere out there~

4 posted 2003-07-24 06:38 PM

Been there, and haven't we all at one time, or another, but I found out in times past there are some things that people *already* have notions, or thoughts, and it takes moving a mountain, or a miracle of God to remove that IDEA they have. Sometimes no matter what, people aren't open to listen, because of that one opinion they won't let go of. Like 2dalimit said...you did the right thing..After that it's all prayer. My heart goes out to you. I hope all turns out well. If my making these long comments are bothering all of you.. would someone let me know, and I will stop. I just can't seem to stop saying what comes to mind, and rings out in my heart.

SharaRose @-->--

Of sound, and speech let all lift the hearer!

pegasus111
Member Elite

since 2000-07-27

Posts 2219
ocala, fl, usa

5 posted 2003-07-25 06:25 AM

let the words fly SharaRose. that's what we're here for. Angel, there is nothing else to do. Be yourself and perhaps, be more selective? best wishes from an admirer...

the woods are lovely, dark, and deep, but I have promises to keep, and many miles to go before I sleep...Frost

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

6 posted 2003-07-25 07:32 AM

Nicole,

I really enjoyed this and if there is truth to it, I hope it turns out well.

Susan C.

Solstice Son
Member

since 2000-09-19

Posts 469

7 posted 2003-07-25 01:24 PM

deeeeeeeeeeeep sighs.

you write the bestest stuff hun.....

- bows low in homage -

" and I dream of her always,
even when I don't dream.
her name's on my tongue
and her blood's in my stream."

'Christmas in Prison' John Prine

SweetSerenity
Member

since 2003-02-16

Posts 52
Canada

8 posted 2003-07-26 04:50 PM

I thought this poem was extremely beautiful.
As someone said already, we have all been through this.
Amazing job.

~A touch of Sweetness . . . . . A lifetime of Serenity~

DawnG

Senior Member

since 2000-06-23

Posts 1494
United States

9 posted 2003-07-26 11:54 PM

If you are in fact writing a true story account, you have a lot of courage that you have shown here.

I am trying the online dating thing again and have been e mailing with someone for about 2 or 3 days now. As of right now we are getting along fine and having a lot in common, but he doesn't know I'm disabled yet. We'll see what happens when that issue comes up.

Dawn

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

10 posted 2003-07-27 07:17 PM

Enjoyed...James

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

11 posted 2003-07-27 08:37 PM

Nicole~
Amazing how softly across a heart a 'BrokenWingedAngel' can fly~

Lovely emotions penned here~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
[email protected]

Joyce Johnson

Member Rara Avis

since 2001-03-10

Posts 9912
Washington State

12 posted 2003-07-29 07:08 PM

Sometimes we are rebuffed when we are honest and open. but it pays in the long run. Joyce

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