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aries_luv_ppl
Senior Member

since 2001-09-20

Posts 1448
Universal Mind

0 posted 2003-06-10 08:23 PM

Out in the Sea

Dinging, dinging, dinging...
Raining drops
Accompany by wind as
Piano sounds, echoing
My pot of thoughts.

Suddenly,
I am surrounded in the mist.
My eyes are dazed with confusion,
Wondering...
Perhaps I have been
Too harsh to myself.

Every time I was to say
"Girl, you're pretty."
To my mirror, I hesitated
Cause I couldn't face the girl in me.

I was a young girl with a pretty heart,
Yet when I was in childhood
I never knew I was
Lovable.

Cause all the time I thought,
A little bullying among siblings
Was a bad bad thing,
While it in fact it is a common thing,
A process for children to learn
To be Co-operative, and caring.

Now I am a woman,
Yet I made the same mistake
That I did in childhood.

I have this ideal woman
Image stick to my face,
That I
That I overlook my attributes
Which exist in me.

No matter who compliment me,
I feel
I feel I'm more corrupted with
Time passing by.

Innocent once was there,
Now is fading
Fading away...
And more bad habits
Developed
As I learn about the world.

Once I was never jealous,
I was forever patient,
Now it seems like I'm losing
All those good things inside me.

And I,
I can't help but be sad,
Feeling
Shore is so far away.
And waves are
Too high for me to breathe.
I'm drowning...

Yet just I was to out of breath,
A familiar face looks down.
His voice seems like my pastor's
And it seems like the voice of my friends,
Then I know
This is my Father's voice.

He reminds me
We are born perfect.
He made each one
With unique, special plans.
That our goodness
Is inborn in us-
Never could be taken away.

Thank you Lord for your words.
I will try to rediscover
The child in me,
And stay forever young
In my heart.

(c)June 10, 2003
Eliza Simmons

Eliza Simmons
~Every girl has a dream within.
~Yesterday insult, today gain.

[This message has been edited by aries_luv_ppl (06-11-2003 07:44 PM).]

Nightshade

Member Patricius

since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

1 posted 2003-06-10 10:58 PM

You have expressed your feelings well Eliza. I enjoyed this. Chris

"Hope" is the thing with feathers-
that perches in the soul....

-Emily Dickinson

idleeyes86
Member

since 2003-06-09

Posts 64
Somewhere over the rainbow

2 posted 2003-06-11 05:13 AM

I certainly know a few people who will empathise with this. I admire the way you are completely honest here, yet you don't start going into self-pity, you just say what you feel. And you leave the reader on a hopeful note.

midnightblues
Senior Member

since 2000-07-01

Posts 1597
Singapore

3 posted 2003-06-11 09:26 AM

Dear Eliza,

i understand ur expression, and i like this hopeful poem so much

Love
Michelle

If there cannot be equal in affection, then let the one with more be me - midnightblues™

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

4 posted 2003-06-11 09:26 AM

Eliza~
You are a reflective poetess~
Insightful piece of penning here~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Trillium

Member Patricius

since 2001-03-09

Posts 12098
Idaho, USA

5 posted 2003-06-12 12:27 PM

Eliza: I enjoyed this poem.

Betty Lou Hebert

Joyce Johnson

Member Rara Avis

since 2001-03-10

Posts 9912
Washington State

6 posted 2003-06-14 06:54 PM

Marge used the right words. Reflective and I hope you are understanding of your own faults as much as you are of others. God didn't make junk. Love Joyce

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