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Tristan Junior Member
since 2003-03-12
Posts 29 |
If my walls break apart, and i crumble to the floor. Will you be there? If I decide to change, and become a new person. Will you stay here? If I can't climb out, of this pit I stumbled into. Will you help me? If I can never reach my dreams, and give up on all hope. Will you love me? If my world suddenly shatters, and I am left to fall. Will you catch me? [This message has been edited by Tristan (03-13-2003 02:55 PM).] |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Tristan~ I like the gently worded questions~ Hope you get a resounding 'yes' to all~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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SPIRIT Senior Member
since 2002-12-29
Posts 1745California Desert |
I liked this - interesting set of questions. If I can't climb out, of this pit I stumbled on to. Will you help me? Just a thought here though, in my opinion, would you not have stumbled 'into' a pit rather than 'on to'?????????????????? Really liked the post. |
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Tristan Junior Member
since 2003-03-12
Posts 29 |
yeah sorry i fixed it |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Very nicely done and much enjoyed! ~Hugs~ ~ Trace my body with your words.. |
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KristieSue
since 2003-01-31
Posts 1460PA, US |
if she truly loves you, a "yes" should be all of the above... longingly beautiful.... KS |
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SPIRIT Senior Member
since 2002-12-29
Posts 1745California Desert |
Looking good! |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
I don't know who you're talking to, but I hope someone is there to help you. Joyce |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
Will you? I love it.. *sniff* really beautiful. Simply said and beautiful. Bless your cotten sockies, you poetic maniacs. ^_^ |
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Flower Member
since 2003-03-15
Posts 240California |
Nice and often asked questions I think. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Some will and some won't...but we hope those we care about also care about us...James |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
I missed this? I do hope that they are and will be there to catch you... If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried. |
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TheGoalie Junior Member
since 2003-06-15
Posts 47Poughkeepsie, Ny/Long Island, Ny |
I like the repetition. It catches the eye, and keeps the reader engaged. The sentiment of the poem is also one we've all felt at one time or another I'm sure. Excellent job. "Ain't Got no quarrels with God, ain't got no time to grow old. Lord knows I'm weak, won't somebody get me off of this reef" |
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aries_luv_ppl Senior Member
since 2001-09-20
Posts 1448Universal Mind |
This is nice. Eliza Simmons |
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midnightblues Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 1597Singapore |
Hopeful questions they are, i'm sure every one of us has been there sometime or other. thanks for sharing ^_^ Love Michelle If there cannot be equal in affection, then let the one with more be me - midnightblues™ |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
just wonderful |
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BrokenWingedAngel Member
since 2003-02-28
Posts 60 |
Short, simple, and beautifully written  You've asked all the questions we've all wondered in life. May the answers you seek be forever yes. BWA I awake to a world I don't want. There is no transition for me. I am in heaven. I am in hell. |
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