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SPIRIT Senior Member
since 2002-12-29
Posts 1745California Desert |
THE GLASS The glass A kaleidoscopic wonder, Fragmentizing life Into a many faceted oneness. It is a barricade Against unseen forces, A shelter from the enemy, From life, from self. It has a warmth That fuels the fires From so deep within, That the cold is unknown. It holds joy, laughter, And a tingling sense Of goodness. The glass is a deceptive tool, It is an excuse For an inexplicable destructiveness. Its hold is strong, forceful, It won't let go. The mind is thrust Into a black hole Of nothingness Resulting in - nothing. Love is destroyed At the very root, Poverty is created, Poverty of the heart, Of the soul Of the consciousness. The glass is Oft times desirous, Yet so very evil, Creativity, morals, Human decencies and values Are blatantly cast aside. The need for such things Is lost, as each swallow From the glass is greedily taken. It has made losers out of winners, Cowards out of heroes, And sinners out of saints, It is a war zone, Where there is no war. The glass A kaleidoscopic wonder, Fragmentizing life Into a many faceted oneness. A SELF-MADE HELL I be me BUT who does me be? |
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cupcake Member
since 2003-01-05
Posts 116 |
Pretty powerful this. Excellent! I'm a reader - not a writer. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
SPIRIT~ There appear to be many facets of the 'glass' that are tempting~ Intriguing perspectives~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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SPIRIT Senior Member
since 2002-12-29
Posts 1745California Desert |
Thank you for reading and commenting. I be me BUT who does me be? |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssss) Oh Das, this is so very sad but true, sweet friend, there are so many optical illusions we confront in life and I only wish love could be authentic to all in understanding and we can embrace it rather than see it behind a display case! (sad sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Das, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
wow.... |
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SPIRIT Senior Member
since 2002-12-29
Posts 1745California Desert |
Thank you for commenting. |
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lorenlynn Member
since 2003-01-27
Posts 203California Beaches |
I see this every day!! great writer when do I get to read your novel? |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
I agree, this is a very powerful piece of work... thanks for sharing regards, sudhir |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
great story Spirit. You seem to have an endless supply. Love, Joyce [This message has been edited by Joyce Johnson (02-21-2003 08:52 PM).] |
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CHILI Member
since 2002-09-08
Posts 244 |
Spirit, this is one heck of a write! Thanks for sharing. "rainbow" |
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Chanson Senior Member
since 2000-08-19
Posts 1559Up Creek w/Out Paddle |
I am adding my voice to the others. Very nice piece, Spirit. *s When you think you have heard it all, |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
An impressive, multifaceted description of drinking and all its various pitfalls. Perhaps you might like to try putting some structure into some of your poetry. You certainly are able to accomplish much with words but you may be able to accomplish still more if you apply the correct structure to them. Poetry is an excercise in creativity in so many more ways than just the words themselves. That's what makes it so fun both to write and to read. "If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh" |
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SPIRIT Senior Member
since 2002-12-29
Posts 1745California Desert |
You are probably correct but to be perfectly honest I don't know what 'structure' means. For over 50 years I have been writing bits and pieces strictly to please myself, if I had to have stopped and 'educated' myself and conform to what things should be I would never have written a word for learning and I never meshed at all, not as a child and not as an adult. I appreciate very much your comments, indeed I do, but I honestly don't believe I am going to change at this stage of the game. |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
I guess by structure I meant some form to the poems rather than the somewhat jumbled lines you have here. I am amazed! You have been writing for fifty years! I don't think you're ever too young to learn. As far as "conforming" to something, I think that education doesn't conform you. Rather, it throws fuel on your own personal fire of intellectual progress and even rebellion. Sure a lot of what you come up with in life is not original, but the act of coming up with it or experiencing again what inspired someone to come up with it can be just as rewarding as a truly original idea. But if you give your mind a steady diet of new ideas[I believe this to be not much different from any formal education save for some lack of formality and perhaps a teacher], which you are doing here, I imagine, you will invent new creations and new spins on old ideas. In truth, however, I think my initial comment about your form was unfounded. It seems I hadn't explored enough of your work. But I do hope my above pointers on *education* were helpful nonetheless. Heck, it should be me accepting hints from you, lol! "If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh" |
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SPIRIT Senior Member
since 2002-12-29
Posts 1745California Desert |
Thanks for commenting again and one is certainly never to old to learn. But I write to enjoy myself. I found studying a most enormous chore, I was always a dreamer whilst my sister has spent her whole life in study mode. We are who we are, by design or otherwise. I like to putter around putting pen to paper and writing sometimes about what I know, sometimes not. My brain is intact though - honest!  |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Very powerful write..much enjoyed. Gets my vote..and a hug! ~ Trace my body with your words.. |
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Jason Lyle Senior Member
since 2003-02-07
Posts 1438With my darkling |
wow,I knew I drank too much...........but to rub it in.............ouch. Jason |
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coyote Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 1077 |
Good write, Spirit. Sometimes what is in the glass is what creates the Hell. Speaking from "The Corner Pub" that is. I know mine was.......? coyote  "The greatest of all faults is to be conscious of none." Thomas Carlyle [This message has been edited by coyote (02-25-2003 07:52 PM).] |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
The intricacy of a kaliedoscope... is a wonderful theme.. I enjoyed this...  |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
SPIRIT - you know...I have enjoyed everything I have read by you thus far, and this one belongs in the book too!! Chris "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Now I loved this, and your comment about "structure" as I am in the same area, knowing not how I write I just do! |
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aries_luv_ppl Senior Member
since 2001-09-20
Posts 1448Universal Mind |
I like it! ~Every girl has a dream within. |
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Flower Member
since 2003-03-15
Posts 240California |
This I can relate to, it is very true. |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
The glass A kaleidoscopic wonder, Fragmentizing life Into a many faceted oneness. It is a barricade Against unseen forces, A shelter from the enemy, From life, from self. It has a warmth That fuels the fires From so deep within, That the cold is unknown. It holds joy, laughter, And a tingling sense Of goodness. I liked this especially  |
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