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SPIRIT Senior Member
since 2002-12-29
Posts 1745California Desert |
SPIRIT She walks the paths within the woods, Her feet bare touch the ground, In flowing gown, and ghostly glow, She never makes a sound. She seeks to find her lover, Her eyes are weepy red, Her hair, unkempt and matted Is piled high upon her head. Her lover died a soldier’s death Upon a field of green, Buried in an unmarked grave No end by her was seen. In sorrow her own life she took, She didn’t want to stay, Just one more human casualty Of the Blue and Gray. So long she’s trod within these woods, Forlorn, beyond compare Just searching for her lover, Who is neither here nor there. How sad to see this lonely soul, You do but feel her plight, ‘Oh restless spirit find thy peace, And move towards the light‘. I be me BUT who does me be? |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
The rhythm and flow of this piece is flawless. A superb write, that I really enjoyed. |
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lorenlynn Member
since 2003-01-27
Posts 203California Beaches |
A rhymning one from you - I liked it very much. [This message has been edited by lorenlynn (02-09-2003 09:40 PM).] |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
this was amazing, the imagery was so vivid that you saw the "unkempt hair" and the whole mood was sad on the very first line and kept a beautiful rythm... Regina "heaven truley knows that thou art false as hell...one that loved not wisely,but too well..she swore..'twas a strange ,'twas passing strange"-othello |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
Very well done and so sad. Joyce |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Hauntingly sad. Enjoyed. Chris "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very well expressed, Spirit! |
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SPIRIT Senior Member
since 2002-12-29
Posts 1745California Desert |
Thank you all for the great comments, I appreciate them very much. |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
SPIRIT: I enjoyed this story, sad though it is. Really well done and a good read. Betty Lou Hebert |
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cupcake Member
since 2003-01-05
Posts 116 |
I loved this - could actually 'see' the person you were writing about. Good!!!!!!!! I'm a reader - not a writer. |
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ellie LeJeune Member Elite
since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156King of Prussia, PA USA |
Exquisite poetry and so sad ...You have a gift for giving words life and vibrancy! Ellie A friend hears the song in my heart, and sings it to me when my memory fails. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
just fantastic! great imagery! |
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aries_luv_ppl Senior Member
since 2001-09-20
Posts 1448Universal Mind |
Know what if you did mark this as submittion to the book I would be the first one to vote for it!. Beautiful Imagery... And most importantly I can feel it. Thanks so much for sharing. ~Every girl has a dream within. |
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