Corner Pub #2 |
Wearing Gloves |
aries_luv_ppl Senior Member
since 2001-09-20
Posts 1448Universal Mind |
When the wind come She knows not cold, All she desires is food. Wearing warm gloves Playing with sticks, Nothing in the world Would bother her. When the bird drops on the Ground, she thinks its in alseep. She puts the bird in a box, Hoping to create a home for it. Lack of knowledge, But she desires nothing... All she desires is Living in her own world... Daydreaming...and dream big! Dreaming how she would be rich Dreaming of boys after her... (slow) And whenever she thinks of boys She hesitates and then sobs, Sobs for her loneliness. "I'm a useless ungly fools, Who will want to even be friends with me?" Saying that she cries and cries. Tears break down like a broken dam. All I can do is wish... Putting a sock by the window, Wait for Jesus the Santa who will come... And grants all her wishes one by one... And gives her sweet...melody dreams. //this is part of my ezboard profile... Eliza Simmons |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
Sweet Eliza, you have me mixed up with this one. I thought you were writing about a small child until you brought in the boys. I guess maybe you are writing about a self who is growing but hanging on to her childish ways. Gave me pause for thought. Joyce |
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akira Member
since 2002-07-13
Posts 79Idaho |
great poem..i am a little confused on it but wonderful job....your very skilled Akira |
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aries_luv_ppl Senior Member
since 2001-09-20
Posts 1448Universal Mind |
hehe Joyce...you got it! Eliza Simmons |
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SPIRIT Senior Member
since 2002-12-29
Posts 1745California Desert |
Interesting! I had to read more than once because I get confused easily, but I get it, I really do get it. I am an enigma, even unto myself. |
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aries_luv_ppl Senior Member
since 2001-09-20
Posts 1448Universal Mind |
hehe...maybe this one is not a good poem...since it is not uniform...I can see why it's confusing now. My ideas just flowed when I write it. Actually, this is, I think, the third time recently my poem carry an unclear message. Hopeuflly my communication class will polish my skills. Thanks for commenting. Eliza Simmons |
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midnightblues Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 1597Singapore |
Dear Eliza, the way you portray the innocence of the girl amazes me. i really like this! Love Michelle If there cannot be equal in affection, then let the one with more be me - midnightblues™ |
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