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Joyce Johnson

Member Rara Avis

since 2001-03-10

Posts 9912
Washington State

0 posted 2002-10-22 04:37 PM

Ambivalent Autumn

Autumn edges in cautiously,
Welcomed in with out the ardor
That we show to Summer and Spring.
Autumn must try a bit harder.

She wildly wields her big paint brush
To splash strokes of color on trees;
Ever more boldly seducing,
With guile putting us at our ease.

Then just as we're falling for her,
She does a total turn about;
Destroys her beautiful paintings
And puts last of Summer to rout.

Like many beautiful women,
Aware of her seductive charms,
She greets the incoming Winter
And holds him in welcoming arms.

As many charmers before her,
She succumbs to a reckless scamp.
He takes the treasures she offers
And treats her like a worthless tramp.

Poor Autumn soon becomes listless
And silently passes away,
Knowing it would have been better
Had she allowed Summer to stay.

By Joyce 10/22/02

[This message has been edited by Joyce Johnson (10-22-2002 08:59 PM).]

pegasus111
Member Elite

since 2000-07-27

Posts 2219
ocala, fl, usa

1 posted 2002-10-22 05:16 PM

I have never thought of the seasons in a sexual context. This is origional. nice work Joyce.

the woods are lovely, dark, and deep, but I have promises to keep, and many miles to go before I sleep...Frost

Larry C

Member Patricius

since 2001-09-10

Posts 10286
United States

2 posted 2002-10-22 06:31 PM

Joyce,
What an excellent write. Though I must confess from here...cool weather doesn't look that bad.

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

Joyce Johnson

Member Rara Avis

since 2001-03-10

Posts 9912
Washington State

3 posted 2002-10-22 09:01 PM

Thank you Pegasus and Larry. Joyce

A. L. Becker
Member

since 2002-09-06

Posts 167
San Francisco, California

4 posted 2002-10-23 03:21 AM

dear Joyce, i loved that Autumn must try a little harder! wow, very nice.
Annie!

Trillium

Member Patricius

since 2001-03-09

Posts 12098
Idaho, USA

5 posted 2002-10-23 05:38 PM

Joyce: Good poem and I really enjoyed it. Autumn is my favorite season of the year, even if it doesn't last as long. Cleverly done.

Betty Lou Hebert

hush
Senior Member

since 2001-05-27

Posts 1653
Ohio, USA

6 posted 2002-10-23 06:05 PM

I really like this. It's a neat metaphor, and I liked a lot of the wordplay and alliteration you used throughout this.

I especially liked the line:

'Welcomed in with out the ardor'

It has a really cool flow, and I also really liked its rhyming counterpart in that stanza. I think it really added to the personification of the season.

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

7 posted 2002-10-23 06:11 PM

Joyce~
This is absolutely so cute ... and so well done~

I just love the entire theme~
Wonderful write ... and I'm betting you had fun writing it~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

8 posted 2002-10-23 08:29 PM

What a novel way of depicting the coming and going of the seasons--so sensual and seductive---I'll never look at them the same way again! tehe

Linda

CHILI
Member

since 2002-09-08

Posts 244

9 posted 2002-10-24 03:31 PM

Once again, I am in awe. Great piece.

aries_luv_ppl
Senior Member

since 2001-09-20

Posts 1448
Universal Mind

10 posted 2002-10-24 06:20 PM

hey that is orginal! I wish mine are that creative! Love your piece Joyce

Eliza Simmons
~Sometimes when I look back at what I wrote, I don't recognize the 'Me' in the past anymore.

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