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Martie
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0 posted 2000-06-28 08:55 PM


     Meditation

In the deep of listening
I sway a seaweed dance
where breathing is sweet intoxication
and my hair like dark rain, rains up,
orange fish with marble eyes
enclose themselves there
in green twilight daydream
flowing past precision’s dart,
this grace is slithering silent soft
and there is no voice but a flutter sings
like winged bird captured above a flower
stilled yet vibrant in delight of nectar
waiting - waiting this verdant display
to capture bliss.

The sound moves through the grass
drinking dew it floats across blade
and fulfills its silent velvet grace
in a sigh that feathers across the swamp
and through the briar's blistered path
that time made to a wealth of purple lupine
then waiting there in divine seclusion
a dance a dance a dance  
that drenches every pore with feeling
and peace so sultry so inclusive
I’m lost for the open that I’ve melted.




[This message has been edited by Martie (edited 06-29-2000).]

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1 posted 2000-06-28 09:17 PM


I'm right there with you, Martie! This is absolutely wonderful!  

Denise

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2 posted 2000-06-28 09:38 PM


A quiet poem..meant to be read in a whisper! Truly wonderful.  
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3 posted 2000-06-28 09:39 PM


Martie~

'I sway a seaweed dance'

This alone is worth the read
then you add ...

'flutter sings
like winged bird captured above the flower'

and then you take me further into serenity with ...

'fulfills its silent velvet grace
in a sigh that feathers across the swamp'

I am 'melted' ....
Thank you for this beautiful gift, my friend.
~*Marge*~




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Martie
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4 posted 2000-06-29 10:37 AM


Denise--oh, I'm so glad you joined me!

PdV--whispering here...

Marge--thank you for the beauty of reply!

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5 posted 2000-06-29 11:18 AM


It continues to amaze me how you can come up with such wonderful phrases and weave them into your poetry....wonderful work again, madam..
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6 posted 2000-06-29 11:20 AM


"and peace so sultry so inclusive"
this is so perfect, really love this marite  

Martie
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7 posted 2000-06-29 11:15 PM


You continute to amaze me, deer, with your always sweet replies!

Corazon---thank you, I'm so glad that you enjoyed my poem.

[This message has been edited by Martie (edited 06-29-2000).]

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8 posted 2000-06-30 02:14 AM


Hi ya Martie,

Nice to see your getting into a little meditation. We just got back from camping and I want to meditating or the underside of my eyelids. I should tell I like your stuff a little more than I do. Sending prayers

Forever Dale

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9 posted 2000-06-30 06:05 AM


This is just beautiful Martie ... if flows
so softly and sweety, almost tickling my
mind, absolutely stunning words!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

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10 posted 2000-06-30 06:17 AM


Nice poem, I liked it and after reading PDV's reply, I tryed reading it again in a wisper and enjoyed reading it even more, a very intelligent poem .
L.of.L. Tom .


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11 posted 2000-06-30 08:32 AM


Oh yes... I'm dancing now...
Martie
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12 posted 2000-06-30 08:55 PM


Hi Dale, I've missed you--I expect some wonderful camping poems from you and RG, you hear!

Kit--you say such nice things in your replies...thank you so much.

Tom--thank you for the intelligent--makes me feel...ah, intelligent..I like that!

Nan--I'm so glad my words made you dance--quite a feat or feet (no pun intended)


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