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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Long lonely nights with only the warmth of your image burning in my mind... Days, longer hotter harder, because you are close enough to touch, but forbidden... Sweet pain, everytime our eyes meet, rushing through my body Just the sound of your voice brings desire, hot strong and oh so forbidden... Fantasy, dreams winding twisting and coming up hard against reality Because you are...forbidden |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
Forbidden fruits are always the juiciest!!! Great poem, Paula! Love and hugs, Lizzie  "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight." |
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Jan Member
since 2000-06-14
Posts 114 |
Yikes! This was very intense. A great read. From experience, the forbidden fruit lingers on your lips and it is impossible to wash away the flavor. [This message has been edited by Jan (edited 06-28-2000).] |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Forbidden pleasures...like a thief in the night...thanks |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
OH MAN!!! I LOVE THIS POEM!!! very cool,intense and well written... oh how i relate... excellent expression here paula... I walk in the garden of Eden so many forbidden pleasures to conceive I am weak to the fruit's temptations they call out to me...they call me EVE  take care, jm you can say baby baby can I hold you tonite maybe if I said the right words at the right time you'd be mine baby can I hold you tonite Tracy C |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Paula Finn...this is the first of yours I've read, but I see that you've been around a little while, so FIRST, a belated WELCOME to Passions! Really like your piece here...reminds me that it does always seem like the grass is always greener on the other side of the fence...but just remember, it's just because THAT guy spread more fertilizer! Look forward to seeing more of your work! Hugs, Sunny ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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JulieAnn Senior Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 754Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!! |
I relate very much to this poem......very well expressed......great writing... Julie :) |
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kat Member
since 2000-05-20
Posts 387 |
Paula: How I relate, how I relate, HOW I RELATE!!! LOL. Forbidden fruit doesn't always mean you can't have a little nibble sometimes. Well, maybe just a little? hmmmmm? lol. This was an amazing poem. Great work!  kat |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
I'll have to thank Jan for tipping me off about this poem. How did you escape me? I also live at this site and yet I totally missed all of your poems. A gret poem, really passionate. Sink your teeth into the apple because forbidden fruits should be sampled. look forward to more from you. "monuments put from pen to paper turns me into a gutless wonder" Manic street preachers |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Very intense expression here Good writing I enjoyed this read |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
JM...thanks I enjoy your writing too. Its nice to finally have a place to write and have others acknowledge the effort. Sunshine...thanks for the welcome...and lol at the fertilizer, thats not how I would have put it but yours is a more poetic turn of phrase. JulieAnn...you always encourage and that gives me courage to keep posting things here...thanks Kat...mmmm little nibbles on forbidden things...what a concept Brian...Sometimes I am easily overlooked but I hope now you have found me you look for my stuff and tell me what you think...its nice to hear a mans opinion Cocobaci....thanks |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Excellent Paula! Forbidden ... oh, but that's why we want it all the more! Wonderful writing here, really enjoyed this! Best wishes, /Kit |
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demoninlove Member
since 2000-02-11
Posts 211Dehradun |
This Poetess Knows All! Deepak Menon |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Kit...thanks yes forbidden things always seem sweeter. Demon...not all just enough to keep me guessing |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
That's why forbidden fruits lead us to believe we want them because of the challenge. Well written, nice imagery Take care, Melissa Honeybee The beauty of poetry gives me wings to fly |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
Paula, this reminds me of a Poison Tree by William Blake...in the poem, the speaker kills his foe by tempting him to eat the forbidden apple...dont think this is what you want to hear but that was the image most intensely conjured up in my mind... [This message has been edited by kaile (edited 07-02-2000).] |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Melissa and kaile...sorry it took so long to respond...thanks for your words and for reading my stuff |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Paula* Very well done.....is it that the fruit is actually better or the "want what we can't have" syndrome...I have never been able to answer that question for myself...lol but either way it looks very TASTY at times!!! Thanks for sharing this~ |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
I know this feeling........ like I always want what I can't touch...... I'll keep coming back to this one (Saying it is very good isn't saying enough...) Hold life with an open hand....leaving it room to grow.... |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Butterflies...I think its more wanting whats just out of reach...like the apple at the top of the tree... Sunny1...you spoil me...always with the praise...thanks so much |
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