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SpitFire
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0 posted 2000-06-27 10:17 PM


~Hi there,...this poem contains 35 Titles from your poems...I just took a chunk and used them in order at the time they were on  my screen. I know,...kinda lame.hehe.  Title credits at the end of the poem. *Peace.

Your Titles,...In My Poem

Sifting Sand, searching for pieces of me, through crystal dust.
Slowly gathering, In Due Time, I'll fill that pail.
Then I'll lay my weary body, in the Glist'ning Grass.
And in a Dream's Continuation, I step with tears in my eyes,to the Other Side.
Simple Pleasures such as, the glitter in the clouds,
make a half smile on my face, but You Stole My Heart.
And You May Find This Humorous, but it was a China Doll Heart,
that meant the world to me.
Now, when I look into your eyes, your Darkness Glows.
All those times I held you,like a Mother's Love.
Now, in This Moment, I make An Offering
to a Dear Friend,Jungle Mouth Jim.
That's what I should call you.
After all that animal-like behavior that you displayed.
Here now I swim in the Aftermath,
saying goodbye to the Missed Mist.
I call to the winds to carry my message.
I thought you were Bigger Than Life.
Taking me riding On The Spirit Cosmos,
by the million mile hill with the Rolling Rock.
To a shore far away, with Passions' Sands of Evermore.
Atleast that's what you always told.
And Only For You, would I have done those things.
Those Untitled events, that will remain that way.
I only wanted you to Hold Me.
Not just Somewhere, Someone, but right here and you.
I longed to be Held In Your Arms.
Once There Was a Man underneath the filth of you now.
I Have Been Told By Him, that his water will boil in time.
This he has proved true. He has no Mother, he needs love,
but he needs to let me live in a peaceful Genesis Evermore.
This Heartbreak you've caused, makes me feel like a Little Girl Lost.
Swimming but drowning...and  needing.
And when the Curtain of Rain falls gently on top of the water I struggle in,
I'll make my Wishes Three. I'll wish for all my Dreams of Tomorrow,
and blow kisses to the wind when they come true.
This girl inside,...you see,...She will survive.

*~Thank you all for the words.....I hope that noone minds???...Anyway,Thank you to Martie,Rex A McCoy,Meadowmuse,Sunshine,Brian K,Dsnyder,Marge T,Prometheus,Mellissa H,Serenity,Ethome,Sudhir I,Dark Angel,H Arlequin,Wayoutwalt,Mark B,Kat,Julieann,Elizabeth S,Corazon,Marina,Jeffrey C,Janet Marie,Irish Rose,Lone Wolf,Jmlee.*Peace.


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Temptress
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1 posted 2000-06-27 10:26 PM


an interesting twist on things. This was very creative, and I enjoyed it.

Nothing can deter a poet, for he is actuated by pure love. Who can predict his comings and goings? "Thoreau"



Rex Allen McCoy
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2 posted 2000-06-27 10:30 PM


neat idea ... and you put it all together quite nicely
  
Rex}>{{{{o>


[This message has been edited by Rex Allen McCoy (edited 06-27-2000).]

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3 posted 2000-06-27 10:34 PM


SpitFire~ this is so creative! Very very good!   -SEA

Live,Love,Laugh :) ~SueB



Honeybee
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4 posted 2000-06-27 10:38 PM


~Spitfire~

You go girl!  This is was unique and well written what a creative mind you have.  I loved this  

Take care,
Melissa Honeybee

Denise
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5 posted 2000-06-27 11:14 PM


Very creative, SpitFire! Wow! That took alot of work to do that so well!

Denise

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6 posted 2000-06-27 11:21 PM


WOW, you are good!

How could anyone mind after reading this?

All my love,
Jeffrey


SpitFire
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7 posted 2000-06-28 08:58 AM


~Thank you all for reading. I know it is a bit strange,...but there is a story in there somewhere. Thanks again.....and to the folks whose titles I used. *Peace.
Lone Wolf
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8 posted 2000-06-28 03:40 PM


SF,

LOVED IT!!!!!  Creative idea!!  You know I do not mind at all.  It's an honor to be included my friend!!

LW


Poetry is the spontaneous overflow of powerful feelings: it takes its origin from emotion recollected in tranquility.
--William Wordsworth

brian madden
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9 posted 2000-06-28 03:49 PM


A wonderful idea Spitfire, really clever and  a cool poem. really enjoyed it.  

"monuments put from pen to paper turns me into a gutless wonder" Manic street preachers

TerryW
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10 posted 2000-06-28 04:56 PM


SpitFire~

     Very, very good, my dear!  I love this one!  That really was very creative!  
Keep on wiriting!!!



Love YA~

~you reached inside, you touched my heart,
and I am all the better for it~
Terry A. Woodson, Jr.

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11 posted 2000-06-28 08:50 PM


SpitFire~
Nothing lame about it !
Very creative and very nicely done.
Of course you KNOW you'll get at least 35 replies ! !  
CLEVER ! LOL !  

I love it !
~*Marge*~


~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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12 posted 2000-06-28 09:03 PM


and Thank YOU...y'know,  I've often thought there was a certain poetry to the titles as I scrolled down the page, and You just proved the point, you clever thing, you...well done...
Janet Marie
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13 posted 2000-06-28 10:13 PM


WAY COOL Spitfire..
this is great...
very creative and imaginative...
good idea--good work
take care, jm

you can say baby
baby can I hold you tonite
maybe if I said the right words
at the right time
you'd be mine
baby can I hold you tonite

Tracy C

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14 posted 2000-06-29 02:34 AM


heheh yu hknow i went lookin first for my name and when i saw it my eyes lit up but yuh the poem be so cool yuh my fave part is how you worked in untitled..that takes the cake i love it yuh and cake too
Mark Bohannan
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15 posted 2000-06-29 02:56 AM


Very creative as everyone has said.  Loved it and I bow to your abilities to create such a work that flows with a handful of titles.  No, I don't mind;  as a matter of fact I am honored to be included in your title grabbing.  
tracie66
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16 posted 2000-06-29 05:45 AM


Now this is something to be envious about my friend. This is so creative and talented...great way you've put this together. I'm clapping right now  
Great work Tracie~


Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe



Kit McCallum
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17 posted 2000-06-29 05:49 AM


Excellent idea Spitfire!  That cannot have
been easy at all, and the flow was great ...
beautifully composed, well done!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

JamesMichael
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18 posted 2000-06-29 06:05 AM


This is a very cool idea...you are now officially a SweetFire...James
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19 posted 2000-06-29 08:30 AM


  
This was Excellent Spitfire!!!  You have an amazing talent...and in order???!!!! WOW!!

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20 posted 2000-06-29 09:45 AM


This is great....a good exercise for those that are 'blocked' too!!!  
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21 posted 2000-06-29 09:59 AM


very inventive, AND a great poem....love this girl
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22 posted 2000-06-29 10:44 AM


Oh gosh, I'm sorry I didn't see this before...it's wonderful, clever and just so well done!  Thanks for starting out by Sifting Sand.  
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23 posted 2000-06-29 11:13 AM


Nice Work!!!!I enjoyed it a lot.
SpitFire
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24 posted 2000-06-29 08:33 PM


~Wow everyone,...goodness. Thank you for the replies to this odd little number. haha.  I feel guilty bringing this back up here, but there are so many of you to thank.  Really, each of you have made me smile. Thanks for reading. Take care. *Peace.
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25 posted 2000-06-30 11:18 AM


Now this is great, I love it.

God grant me the serenity to accept the people I cannot change, the courage to change the one I can, and the wisdom to know it's me. ~Unknown



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26 posted 2000-06-30 11:34 AM


Cool idea, I'll have to try something like this myself, it's very inventive and so well done . Loved it .
L.of.L. Tom .


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27 posted 2000-07-03 03:24 PM


This is so creative, what an excellent idea!
You are fun my friend!
Love your poems!
I think it's catching on. I'd like to try this one
day.


dgvarner
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28 posted 2000-07-28 03:52 PM


wow..spitfire..this is too cool!  you did a wonderful job putting all those titles in there and still making sense!!  and you used the titles in order?? (i read that you did..)  i'm a little late in my reading, but--i like it!  i like it!  

dg


"i speak in written word--my lips, no sound may utter..." dgvarner

N2Wishin
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29 posted 2000-07-28 03:56 PM


Very Cool!
Elizabeth
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30 posted 2000-07-28 04:08 PM


I read this before, but never commented. So here I am to say that this was a cool idea that I enjoyed reading!

Elizabeth


Why ME???

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31 posted 2000-07-28 06:29 PM


Very creative & a clever idea!

Marina
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32 posted 2000-07-28 10:02 PM


Great job!!!!!!  I know how hard it is to come up with a story out of those.  I did the same thing for my 1000th post with my own titles and it wasn't easy!  You did a fantastic!

Marina


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