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Winds of Strife
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Winds of Strife |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven 
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The Winds of Strife Along the beach walked two young lovers happily lost in song a breeze born of the sea at their backs. The salty wind pushed them joyfully, effortlessly along, leaving behind their little beach shack. The miles fell away quickly from under their feet, life was so joyous, easy and sweet. Blissful and ignorant of the winds of change, the thought of a struggle to them would be so strange. So never knowing the resistance of the wind , being drifters of the heart, it didn't take very long at all, for the wind to blow them apart. Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
It started out so beautifully, but ended so sadly. You told this tale well, Prometheus. Elizabeth I'm grabbing my hat and coat I'm leaving the cat a note Quick call me a ferry boat-getting out of town! |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Gosh I love your poetry!!!! these last 3 lines just blew me away!!  So never knowing the resistance of the wind , being drifters of the heart, it didn't take very long at all, for the wind to blow them apart. WOW !! Loved it all Yes, I am here, but I am dead, not alive, my body goes on, my spirit has died, and I though alive, feel dead inside. "Rose Petal" |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Prometheus, Those winds can come up out of nowhere and blow you into tomorrow berfore you know it. This was sad, yet beautiful. I have to admit I am captivated by your writing. So happy you have joined our family here. Great writing! Lone Wolf Poetry is the spontaneous overflow of powerful feelings: it takes its origin from emotion recollected in tranquility. --William Wordsworth |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Prometheus,...this is wonderfully written. "For the wind to blow them apart",....oh how this can happen out of nowhere and brings much pain. Thank you for sharing this. Enjoyed reading. Take care. *Peace. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Wonderful poem! I enjoyed this very much! Denise |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Food for thought here. It is amazing how quickly our lives can change. Very well penned. Marina It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen Marina Crossley |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
so true ... so often ... sad ... Rex}>{{{{o> |
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Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
Excellent writing. Enjoyed this very much. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Jamie, I had to come back and read this sad but beautiful piece. Excellent! Yes, I am here, but I am dead, not alive, my body goes on, my spirit has died, and I though alive, feel dead inside. "Rose Petal" |
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Alle'cram Senior Member
since 2000-02-28
Posts 1816Texas |
Excellent writting. Your message so true. Really enjoyed this one. |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Nicely written. Enjoyed the read. |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Jamie, The first thing I do is look for you and you never disappoint. Chance the wind...someday it may bring your hearts desire. |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Elizabeth, Dark Angel, Lone Wolf, Spitfire dsnyder, Marina, Rex, Eloise, Alle', Mike and Paula, You're all kind and generous souls. It is uplifting to read your thoughts on my poem. Thanks to you all. jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
winds of change ... winds of strife ... carry me back to the love of my life, return me to where I left my heart, this love shall never again part *sigh* ... so many sad love poems tonight... I need a happy ending *smile* beautiful poem jamie... wisdom of lessons of love...learned the hard way... the only way I ever learn them..you too?  must be a poets heart rule ... take care sweet-poet jm you can say baby baby can I hold you tonite maybe if I said the right words at the right time you'd be mine baby can I hold you tonite Tracy C |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Easy come........painfully go. Great work Jamie! |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Janet, Butterfly; Having read you both, I give thanks to a pair of gifted poets. And Janet, at least this one came from observation rather than having to live it myself. To butterfly,,,I have one more that I may post one day that I think has a chance to reach those butterfly tears!thanks again..jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
I shall be sure to look for it....kleenex in hand |
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Tanga Junior Member
since 2000-07-02
Posts 39BC Canada |
The winds have been blowing and the eyes have not seen. What a stark contrast when one had been rudely awakened from a sweet song. Such sadness and sorrow. Hugss <**> |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
Wonderful poem, James!!! Love and hugs, Lizzie  "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight." |
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Poetias Junior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 26 |
I'm comparing this poem to the life of a married couple who look upon others with an arrogant bliss. For their situation is (and will be)exactly all that you have said. Have you been watching them?? Smiling.... "Even as love crowns you, so shall he crucify you." -Khalil Gibran THE PROPHET |
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Poetias Junior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 26 |
Absolutely captivating BTW.. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Love the twist Jamie....great work, you had me all the way through, just wonderful. Lessons learned well are lessons well remembered. |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Thanks Everyone!! Sometimes life is like work. Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Blissful and ignorant of the winds of change, the thought of a struggle to them would be so strange. So never knowing the resistance of the wind , being drifters of the heart, it didn't take very long at all, for the wind to blow them apart. .... Wonderful poetry, Jamie, really wonderful... regards, sudhir. |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Very thought-provoking Prometheus ... always thinking we have it all, until it blows away without a moment's notice ... very well written! Best wishes, /Kit |
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ma miller Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806 |
Prometheus, Gotta' be honest with you and say that I read this earlier today and either didn't ponder on it long enough or misunderstood it completely ... Came back this evening to reread and now see the light (duh!!!) ... Wonderfully written ... Fav line ... Blissful and ignorant of the winds of change, the thought of a struggle to them would be so strange. Thanks. My calling before me, let quill be my offering; For to be called poet, no greater gift to receive. M.A.M. |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Sudhir-Kit-m.a.m.- Thanks for the kind reviews. I am sure nobody in here would be so unprepared---lol Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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