Open Poetry #8 |
i have been told |
Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
i've only been told hate i have been told is an unsavory character deceitful and bold it denies its existence to gain a foothold once inside its first goal your sanity mercilessly slicing where no one can see its fury runs amuck damage reigns free brain cells lay dying clear thinking murdered if left out of control your heart is next in danger as it pulls in walls of hardness all around for protection just in case you wise up and ask it to leave it will take your life if you let it with your brain and your heart already under control your soul its next goal ...now all this I know purely word of mouth to my ears this thing called hate has no foothold in me... I've only been told |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Another POWERFUL one from you Corazon... Looks like I am in for a treat... read three poems from you in a short time-span, and feel really great having spend some useful time.... regards, sudhir Death, be not proud, though some have called thee, Mighty and dreadful, for thou art not so; - John Donne |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
you are too kind sudhir, my muse was restless this weekend, I wrote a total of five...glad you enjoyed |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
And all 5 are excellent, as usual.. Big HUSG |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Very creative writing...loved the way you fit it all into the "I've only been told" concept. James |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
a nice report on evil subject matter. well done. |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Oooh,....this is dark and delicious reading. hehe. Very nice. Tough subject matter. Well, well, done. Take care. *Peace. |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
thanks all, wasn't sure I did this one right, so your comments mean much and lol@rg...thank you lady, and I did put one more, but it was in adult ...the other two, don't guess so, just wrote them cause I needed to write |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
I have been told.....that everything you write is worth reading - and they are right. I don't think there's a bad poem in that rhythmic body, corazon. Don't give in to hate but its ok to be ode-ious |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
what a nice thing to say, and lol one I needed to hear, as I feel my poetry is really suffering lately...I have no focus, and I don't have any idea where my muse comes up with these, but it sure does keep me awake at night thanks bal |
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