Open Poetry #8 |
Liquid Paths of Memory |
Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
River water lightly sloshes Around my limbs of ivory hue As gently I move between The worn, liquid paths Of faithful memory. The crown of setting sun Hovers overhead silently It's amber, velvet touch Sending fluid shivers Wafting....falling... O'er my weary spirit. There-just beyond twilight's grasp- Hanging on arms worn with years Drifts a silvered shadow Bearing the name of you. Through the river's aqua sprays I fight, fall, and fight again Trying to catch your light Within my net of stars. Haunted by devouring night My tired soul screams and bleeds Drowning within the swirling waters That once floated our love... Somehow I rise to the surface With the will to search The faded dreams of our yesterdays For the smallest tendril Of you. I will not give up...for our souls are one. *Krista Knutson* "Cherish your vision; Cherish your ideals; Cherish the music that stirs in your heart, the beauty that forms in your mind, the loveliness that drapes your purest thoughts. If you remain true to them, your world will at last be built." ~James Allen~ "We've made houses for hatred...it's time we made a place where people's souls may be seen and made safe"...~Jewel~ |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Krista~ You've got some liquid words here ... beautifully dripping down the page. 'Through the river's aqua sprays I fight, fall, and fight again Trying to catch your light Within my net of stars.' Gosh that's a pretty verse. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Liquids words indeed. This is so filled with imagery and heart that I will probably have to revisit it later. Thank you for sharing this. Will be looking for more of your works. |
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Dusk Treader
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since 1999-06-18
Posts 1187St. Paul, MN |
Me likes this... me likes this much... The sadness and a seeming desperation with the glimmer(Seems a little brighter than that) of hope at the end. "There-just beyond twilight's grasp- Hanging on arms worn with years Drifts a silvered shadow Bearing the name of you. Through the river's aqua sprays I fight, fall, and fight again Trying to catch your light Within my net of stars. Haunted by devouring night My tired soul screams and bleeds Drowning within the swirling waters That once floated our love..." WOW.. now those are some lines, "Trying to catch your light withing my net of stars" You've caught me in a web of words, for sure. Absolutely beautiful Krista. Abrahm Simons "Keep on dreamin' boy 'cause when you stop dreaming it's time to die" - Blind Melon |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
You words paint a picture the memory giver needs to see. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Krista, WOW!! I floated along down the page with this beautiful poem. Excellent!! It reached out and touched me and this ..... Somehow I rise to the surface With the will to search The faded dreams of our yesterdays For the smallest tendril Of you. I will not give up...for our souls are one. GOD, Its BEAUTIFUL! Yes, I am here, but I am dead, not alive, my body goes on, my spirit has died, and I though alive, feel dead inside. "Rose Petal" |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
This is truly lovely, Krista...a reverie of poetry here...nice... |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Marge- Thank you so much, I'm glad you enjoyed it. Mark- Why thank you. Dusk- *blushes* Thank you so much my love, coming from you, it means the world. Prometheus- Thanks! Dark Angel- Thank you my friend, I'm so glad you liked it! Serenity- Thank you also. *Krista Knutson* "Cherish your vision; Cherish your ideals; Cherish the music that stirs in your heart, the beauty that forms in your mind, the lov |
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JulieAnn Senior Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 754Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!! |
beautifully crafted poem you have here..it drew me in and I was LOST....great work loved it!!! Julie :) |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
an inspiring write |
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