Open Poetry #8 |
Missed Mist |
Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Ah rain..... droplets from heaven softly-stroking the dry-crumbling earth of my soul captured and stored within the fragile beaker of my heart but rain disappears moisture-lost evaporating into the thin air becoming mist mist the mystery within my soul it hovers over and around the seasons of my heart you are not rain but the mist that I have missed Angel of Darkness June 2000 My grief lies onward and my joy behind (Shakespeare) |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
i love this imagery and the style you use here i'll hav eto read more of your work. good job keep it up right here. I'm the lord, I'm the havoc, I'm the soul |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Thank you Jeremiah, for your sweet reply My grief lies onward and my joy behind (Shakespeare) |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
ah rain, you drench many a scorched soul, mend many a broken heart's pain, soon with little sunshine patch, you move away becoming pleasant mist mist is as whom, you stay back reminding me of jolly yesterdays cool saturdays, pleasing each day.... ..... O, Angel of darkness, you have penned a very good poem here, so vivid in images, and so pleasing to this eye to read ... regards, sudhir. [This message has been edited by Sudhir Iyer (edited 06-21-2000).] |
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Jan Member
since 2000-06-14
Posts 114 |
Wonderful imagery and a great read! |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
nicely written... enjoyed the poem. |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
DA~ very,very cool! -SEA Live,Love,Laugh :) ~SueB |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
So lovely! I like your play on words too!!! |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
This piece has an awesome "feel" to it, the imagery was great! Thank you for sharing this~ |
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JulieAnn Senior Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 754Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!! |
nice imagry...I liked it much,,,GREAT work. Julie :) |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
AngelGirl ! This is just beautiful ! Not 'dark' ... just 'mist'-ifying ! 'captured and stored within the fragile beaker of my heart' ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Sudhir thank you for your beautiful poetic reply Thanks for taking the time to read, I do appreciate it so. Jan Thank you again, glad you liked Mike, glad you enjoyed it, thank you Sea, thanks for your very very kewl reply Sharon, Thanks again hon *hugs* BDC, Thanks for your lovely reply and it has been a pleasure to share. JulieAnn, Thank you I am glad you liked it. ) Marge, Thank you for your always lovely replies Glad you found it "Mist"-ifying My grief lies onward and my joy behind (Shakespeare) |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Dark Angel, I have spent a few hours today reading your poetry. Most all I have read is outstanding. In the relatively short time span of these works, I have noticed marked improvement in your ability to deftly stroke your words into pictures. This one I think one of the best so I brought it back. Hope you don't mind......jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
She doesn't mind, do you Dark Angel, 'cause now I have read it also...and really enjoyed the read. [This message has been edited by Martie (edited 06-27-2000).] |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Angel I think you described how I had been feeling this past while. 'The dry crumbling earth of my soul...you've described it perfectly! Well written my dear. Love the imagery |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Aahhh,...*Sigh*. I love the way you write. This is so soft and airy and just reads wonderfully. It is beauty. *Peace. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
awesome read |
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